Artemis,you can speak German?And what's more, you've made the others speak it...You don't remember me though.Only Osa-Chan and Quincy~kun did.I'm Kristina,or Miyuu,or Krystal.Whatever.I found your profile again on here,it took forever.I hope you remember me,I miss talking to you and the others.

Anders als meine Vorgänger (= die anderen Reviewer.) schreibe ich mein Review in Deutsch, weil ich vermute, dass du diese Sprache lernen willst (was ich wirklich süß von dir finde!) und vielleicht hilft dir das ja etwas.

Übung macht den Meister - ist bei uns ein Sprichwort. Genauso wie "Kein Meister ist je vom Himmel gefallen."

Bleib dran und du wirst mal wirklich gut werden! Die Idee und den Versuch an sich fand ich sehr süß und gelungen!

(And if you need any translations just write me. ;) I would be honored to help you.)

Deine Sanni. =)
(And if you need an Online-Translater, look here: dict. It's German-English and pretty good!)

Leyk, ZOMG. O.o I sould acctually READ most of this. That is too sad. Anyways, Write mores!XD

Well, you have the same problems like a German who would write in English. Maybe you should ask on of the German authors to read beta if you want to write in their language (you see, my english isn't good ... it's so difficult to write in another language ^^° easier to translate it in mother tongue) But I'm impressed that you tried to use German. Thank you ^^
I think the ficlet is a little bit to short and I miss a clear climax. It's a nice beginning for a story, but to short to be a story itself. I hope you understand my point of view ^^°