Misty wasnt in this at all man. but good story

ok why does everyone keep saying "oh light" i dont understand man!

Wow, five years combined to write all this?! Now I don't feel so bad taking almost nine years trying to think up a fanfic of my own. One I can be truly proud of when I finish. You should be proud of your story. You capture the feel of Ace's story, but with a flare of your own style as well. I don't know why more people do not review this story. You finally got to Ash's element discovery, and it couldn't have been written any better. Maybe I missed something, but how did the Rockets give Erika or anyone else their powers? Erika's scene was really good, you didn't dwell too long on anything that would make the readers gag, or question your own sanity. It kept moving from one thing to the next. Can't wait til your next chapter.
Akewataru

Nice chapter. I was surprised that misty was in sab's gym, then realised that there was somthing wrong. Can't wait for the next chap.

A good chap.

your definately one of the most skilled writers I have ever read, and I have read A LOT of stories.

No mistakes that I noticed, so keep writing!

Poka, An AAML fan

your wrong in the fact that dragons only have one dragon move in their arssenal of moves. I can think of four off the top of my head: Dragon breath, Dragon claw, dragon pulse, and outrage. Also, they can learn an array of other elemental and physical moves such as: thunder, earthquake, blizzard, and fly.

That was a really good chapter though.

Poka, an AAML lover forever.

P.S. If you want I can pm you about an attack I made up that you can use.

if you are reading this plz update this story man i have been waiting for 4 months very good story you have a large number of silent readers soo plz update it plz plz plz

Two years ago I read the Pokemon Dark Wars, which this prequel is to. I understand how you feel about the AKxGO. [Shudders at the thought] Really...awkward and disturbing if you ask me. I do agree that it is really long and kind of moves too fast but it's your story. Do it however you want but you should also listen to (or take the advice) of those reviews. I've noticed there are very little reviews for this story here, very little...

I just read the first three chapters and I gotta say that really like it so far. I'm glad that you're doing a prequel to one of my most favorite fanfics, and I cannot wait to hear more about the Dark Pokemon Wars.

P.S. Have you thought about sending Ace Sanchez a copy of all the material that you have so far, so that he can review it?

I agree with Stink on several points, Ace's story went on for a very long time. Don't rush.

And to respond to any whiner babies.
Everyone here is writing or reading fanfiction. We take others ideas and write stories based upon that. So &&@Q@ when someone writes a fanfic of a fanfic. Its quite hypocritical.

He put up a disclaimer to its no different then any other fanfic.

This is a cool story. Please continue. Ash and Misty forever.

I'm going to be honest: I think trying to pull off a prequel (especially an unauthorized one) to a classic like Pokemon Master is very risky business. I hope you've thought long and hard about this.

That said, here's my critique:
-You seem to be moving a bit quickly. I'm not sure how long you plan on making this, but you're moving rather rapidly. You may want consider dropping off the pace a bit.
-Similar to the first point, you're really pushing to get every little detail from Pokemon Master into your story. You've already mentioned five of the most significant characters within the first chapter. Again, trying to slow your pace a bit will help with this.
-You seem to be maintaining the characters very well from the original work. Good job on that, but keep making sure to develop them so that, by the end of the story, they match the beginning of Pokemon Master.
-You have an excellent balance of dialogue and description, which keeps the story interesting to read.

Good work so far. I haven't decided if I'm going to keep reading, but I may check the next few chapters and see where the story leads.