Heck of a story. It was interesting to watch as your writing evolved in just this story, I almost quit in the first chapter because I found it a little off putting. Glad I didn't it was a great ride. Youv'e got a good handle on the mood of silent hill. For a critigue all I really can say, is that some times you would forget a word. Like you might leave out "had" from a sentence, as in "the woman a gun". You only did it a couple of times. This is something, I do alot myself. I know what I want to write, but I some how skip a word when typing it. Spell check doesn't catch it, and when I proof read my mind puts the word in there. So I miss the ommission. Having a friend proof read is the best guard against it.

By the way thanks for a great story

Ravenspayne.

It took me awhile to finish this story, but I have to say: This story is fantastic! You did a great job writing this. I can tell you put alot into writting this. Great story, man! I loved it. Check out some of my stories (when I start writting more of them) if you would like, too. Don't be afraid to leave a review, either!

-thehighroller1, big fan of this awesome story

P.S: I am a HUGE Rush fanatic, as well. I absolutley loved Snakes & Arrows. To those who do not own the album, I highly suggest buying it. Rush is a great band.

Sorry I haven't got around to reading this dude but it kinda seems the trains left the station on this story.By all the hits it sounds as if it has done quite well.I wish you best of luck for you next endeavor in writing.

P.S.You didn't really need to put me in the credits I didn't really help, guess thats my fault.

Wow, why doesn't this have more reviews? This story is wicked.

Very well done, friend. I see that you also added me onto the credits! Keep up the good work. Wow.

Lookin' good so far. can't wait to read on...

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