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Ea Aderyn 2008-06-04 ch 5,	abuseI was really excited to find your story, and even more elated once I started reading. The concept is original (to me at least) and you write so fluently. I honestly hope you will keep this story up because I want to know what happens next. You also capture the naivety of Cerys perfectly. I look forward to your next chapter. PLEASE update! :] ~Ea
Bone White Butterfly 2008-05-19 ch 5,	abuseAh, Valdemar. ...Way too much nostalgia for a place I've never been. I like this story. It feels like a story (proper story elements and everything), and you've got a grasp for character. The one thing that bugs me is that I sometimes feel like Cerys acts too young to be seventeen. If I had to put this into a real world situation, I'd say she was the 15-year-old sophomore from a little town entering the elite city prep school on scholarship mid-term. Yes, it may seem odd for a fifteen-year-old to marry a twenty-two year old, but she's a farm girl in Valdemar, which for all its wonders (and indoor plumbing) has the feel of a 17th century European country. If there's a business merger involved, I think it's completely possible. About your author bio, I understand the desire to hide the fact that you write fanfiction, but frankly, how do you think people learned to write before colleges taught it? They imitated established authors whose works they loved and admired. Fanfiction is a time-honored tradition, and if it was good enough for the dead guys we read in school, it's good enough for us. Keep writing. Ta.
miarath 2008-04-30 ch 5,	abuseOoch, that was a nice Companion but a very nasty little Mage-trainee, wasn't it? There isn't more to that Companion, is there? Don't worry this is worth continuing, so keep writing! A_A Delighted to see an Update...
Egbert-Jan 2008-04-29 ch 5,	abuseHello, I started reading your story yesterday and sofar I like it. I am only curies about one small item. Are you going to include Kris the twin off the Queen? Except that small point KEEP WRITING ON THIS STORY IT IS GREAT. Regards, Egbert-Jan
GinaStar 2008-04-27 ch 5,	abuseloved it! Especially the part where the companion gave her a ride ;)
sparkyCSI 2008-04-27 ch 5,	abuseI love Rriin! But I usually love all the Kyree and I can honestly say that I am not liking Siara right now. She reminds me too much of the nasty Blues that attacked Talia in her first year! But I have faith in you and hope that those Blues don't turn out like Talia's did!
oneswordsworn 2008-04-27 ch 5,	abuseInteresting. A rough start for her, but wouldn't want things to be easy either. I am curious to see what role this companion plays, as they normally don't choose healers, so very curious. Well done. Please continue this story.
Warbender 2008-04-27 ch 5,	abuseWhat happens when you present the last platinum dragon with a good story? A good review. Well after reading all five chapters. I have just this to say as far as the comments section of my review is concerned. Well Done... Now for the nuts-n-bolts of the thing... I find a good sense of balance to this. However you seem to have lost some of the depth in chapter two, and three. But you regain it over the cours of number four, and five. You have structured it all really well though. However the presentation needs "Tightening up". But only just s little. Chapter length is not really an issue. Especially if the length has got the depth to it to be good no matter the length. Good write so far. This is becomming a "Read worthy" story keeping me interested throughout, and making me want more. Update this soon please.
nohaydeque 2008-04-26 ch 5,	abuseNice OC story! A good amount of detail - not too much, but not too little. Good idea of using a setting so far in the future, you can take more artistic license with it. ;) The one thing I would recommend you not to do with this story is to have her Chosen. It's been done so often... even in the canon! I've always wanted to read a story that had little to do with the Heralds in general, so please, keep going in this direction. :) -nohaydeque-
Pathseekerme 2008-04-26 ch 5,	abuseWhat would we do without as*es to make life in our writing interesting? And you have chosen a mage instead of a "blue" to make Cerys' life interesting... why? Is Gwen friends with this mage and her set? Is Cerys going to be able to confide in the kyree? Or her Companion friend? She obviously is able to make friends... Thank you for having the companion cheer her up!
Pathseekerme 2008-03-29 ch 4,	abuseI really enjoyed reading your story! You are very good at setting up your story and your chapter, and I don't have any trouble telling who are "good" and who are "bad!" I am looking forward to seeing what happens to Cerys (and to her little sister, later). Are Cerys' roommate and "betrothed" related in any way? I get the same slimy feel from both of them! The only thing I saw for you to correct was that you need to put quotation marks around thoughts, just as you would if people were talking out loud. I can't wait to see more from you! Please don't stop writing!
loretta537 2008-02-21 ch 4,	abusethis is a good story, please update it soon.
Jennykin 2007-06-26 ch 1,	abuseThis is my first fanfic read. I love this world and enjoyed your first 4 chapters immensely. Since I'm so new at this, I can't think of any suggestions or advice. I just want to thank you for writing. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
aldoraspritelette 2007-05-17 ch 4,	abusewhat a nice story...i can't wait for you to update...keep up the good work
ginalee 2007-05-15 ch 4,	abuseCerys is developing into a really interesting character - I liked her from the beginning, but she keeps getting better. I can't wait to see how she does in healers!! thanks for the update, I hope to see more soon.

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