Fantastic! please update soon.

Coagulate-to thicken

It's kind of like the phrase gel up only in much more technical terms.

*hands writer e-plushies of the entire crew of the Nebuchadnezzer.*

nice. finish soon.

I like it. Yeah, I agree Neo had a moment of doubt b4 the red pill...

This is soooo great! You did an amazing job in writting this! Please let there be more soon!

Great! Never thought of that seen that way.

Uh oh... baaaaaaaaaaaaaaad idea... I have an unabashedly large ego already and you're just making it worse, lol. Me? Brilliant? Awwwww... Well, I must say that the greatest flattery is that this rather excellent piece of fanfic has a dedication to me at the top. This is GOOD, chickadee. Better than good. Great. I'm glad to see somebody finally write a fic about this scene, and you've done it really fantastically. I'll definitely read the next part(s) as they come!

this is really good. I want more, damn it! Please?

woah. that is soo the scene.

Heeeey, not bad for a first try in the Matrix Fanfic world! Excellent! In this wacky world that I call home, I really support beginning Matrix fanfic writers to do exactly what you did: read the best fanfic out there (gooooo Scottishlass and Centaur!), watch the movie a zillion times and then write in the subtext of a scene that happens in the movie. I highly applaud your efforts and hope to see more and more from you!

Goodness gracious, I'm inspiration? You're gonna give me an ego; I am far from brilliant. :) Your story is a nice little POV piece that will launch you into so much more. Neo is such an interesting character, and getting into his head is tricky. I think you've got a good start; your writing is fluid and detailed. I'd like to see you get into him when he's conversering with Cypher over the gutrot...there's so much going on there that he keeps internalized. Keep going please! Scottishlass

Hey, this is pretty good! Saw a couple typos that could be easily fixed. I like the way you give us Neo's POV. Hurry up and write the rest, dude! _

I think you've got the whole scene from Neo's perspective down quite nicely, and it's not overdone or anything! Let me congradulate you for a wonderful job, and I really hope to see more!

Pretty good for your first Matrix fic. I'm gonna suggest that when you write something like this you make it really unique. Try to not use clichés like Neo feeling he's in a movie. Or, if you do use them, use them in a new way. *ducks* I myself am guilty of using clichés. *ahem* Anyway, can't wait to see more from you!