Okay, I haven't read that far in Naruto yet, so please forgive my lack of knowledge. I will, though, comment from the perspective of a fellow writer and an avid fan of your work, Aria-chan. :D

I agree with Hoodine, as far as the flowery language, but don't follow the footsteps of many and put so many details that you lose the plot. Also, I think the length is okay, but if you're going to have more chapters, you'll need to update frequently. Just remember that the more they threaten you, the more they like your story! (Most of the time...)

Also, I don't really know what's going on, as I'm not exactly completely updated in current Naruto affairs, but it sounds intriguing. No doubt you'll keep Sasuke in character, with your careful research and clever mind.

XD There. I hope I have flattered and encouraged and critiqued you to a satifactory level. TTFN. ^.^

awesome so far! ugh i HATE Karin already. Sakura stopped the whole fangirl thing, and now Karin's in the picutre. damnit.. and chapter 348 annoyed me. Karin... Chapter 350-351, Kishi may make the teams meet up. I'm just perdicting that cause next chap the meet the other guy.. Juugo or somethinn like that. Anyway can't wait for more!

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OMG Karin was an intresting character to look at but I hated her personality, the two faced personality. I fyou look at it in a weird light She is like Sakura maybe a little bit more babyish and hormonal and Suigetsu is like a Naruto XD

I really like how you wrote this. It made me smile but you should try making the chapter longer and more flowery (Detailed) in language.

Interesting take on Sasuke. I like how you kept Sasuke in character taking in current events. One does wonder what this plan of his is...Karin is so not going to take Sakura's place.
Sasuke was willing to do anything kill or die to protect her (two of those times under the curse seal) Besides Karin seems like she wants to get close to Sasuke in order to obtain something from him because she was very loyal to Orochimaru.

it's great so far, update!