that was really good. very van-like. but where's stef in all of this. neways, good! Zhai'helleva! Queen's Own

Wow. That is very good and it fits really well. You are very talented.

Oh, that was really good! It's making me depressed just thinking about poor Van, though. He spends half his time dying and the other half wishing he were dead! Yeeshka! Anyway, the rhyming is neat (as in organized) and you tell his story very well.

alright! thats was cool, good job!

-Nee

Wow, definately depressing, but very well written.

Well, you succeeded. It is depressing. And sad. And very much how Van felt, I'm sure.

Good work.

Zhai'helleva

ouch!I think my heart is bleeding!

*sobs a river and curses* Oh, that's so sad... But where's Stefen in all that angst? Oh, well... *sobs* I really like it, but... *sobs again*

Very sad!

Wow. That was wonderful. It fit Van's mood perfectly, and told the story well, too. Keep it up; your writing is excellent!

Beautiful poem. Power isn't everything, eh?

Poor Van. Still neurotic.

Oooh, lovely. Poor Van, he loved Lendel so much. & gawddemmit, I never baught Stefen. He missed Lendel forever, dambit.

wow. a metered poem with good flow and rhyme! i can just see him playing his lute and singing this! i'm impressed and *grins* a little jealous, i must say... wow.

Very good and depressing poem. Love it!