Intriguing. I like the still, simmering feel of this piece. And the end is nice with its implication of things turning to the better :-)

i just love this story.

i know exactly how it feels to be betryed by someone.

I like your writing. You've got Hayato down pat!

Sad and beautiful, the feelings of Hayato are so...intense. Please continuous it. _

Congratulations!