| Reviews for Wrong move |
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Black Volcarona 8/17/07 . chapter 7Great story! |
cj001122 8/10/07 . chapter 7That was good. |
lamson 8/9/07 . chapter 7amazieng fanfic thanks for writeing it i hope u update it soon |
Vincents Cerberus 7/31/07 . chapter 1Can you update this its really a good story. |
shadowrunner65 7/31/07 . chapter 7honestly man update NOW! OR AS SOON AS POSSIBLE, cause i'am startin to have a freakin anxciety attack here, don't lose a loyal reader to the grip of death by convolsions |
XPD017 7/29/07 . chapter 1I know this is your first attempt at fanfiction but honestly, don't use that as an excuse. Just how many grammatical and spelling errors you have in this story, I've got no clue but it looks like you made at least a hundred. Your characterizations are completely OFF, your scenes have no transitions or proper sense of time, and it looks like you seriously have no respect for women-I mean, look at how you portrayed Sakura: a slut who's willing to sell herself then accuse Naruto of rape? COME ON. And the people who commend this story "as the best fic ever" clearly have no taste. |
Tana 7/29/07 . chapter 3 Wow... you're a fucking retarded. kthxbi |
scione 7/26/07 . chapter 7not bad at all. |
Helix King 7/19/07 . chapter 7Well...grammer is shit in some parts, alright in the others. This last chapter was pretty crappy, Shizune wouldn't just realize what she had done and want forgiveness. How did you come up with Sarah of all things to name the queen of hell? The chapters are a bit too short, and the chapters with songs had little interaction in them. Get a better layout for the story, other then these complaints, I like the story. SO update. |
trogdor0071 7/15/07 . chapter 7 Good story, keep it up. I look forward to reading the rest of it. :) |
GrimMalice 7/14/07 . chapter 7Good story update soon. |
kyunaru 7/13/07 . chapter 7different but good story i guess never read anything like it that's for sure. |
hibiki96 7/12/07 . chapter 7Alright, update! Nice chapter! I liked the demon-whore thing, lol! (And despite capitalization errors, I'm thoroughly enjoying it) Update soon! |
Death Incarnate 7/12/07 . chapter 7great to see this updated again, nice chapter too but it needs to be longer. Please update soon |
Azndrifter25 7/12/07 . chapter 7Plz don't kill Shizune, well kill Sakura after delivering his child but plz it's too bad that Naruto will never know the truth after his one way trip to hell and back thanks to his mother and the pink haired hoe. |