Reviews for Wrong move
Black Volcarona 8/17/07 . chapter 7
Great story!
cj001122 8/10/07 . chapter 7
That was good.
lamson 8/9/07 . chapter 7
amazieng fanfic thanks for writeing it i hope u update it soon
Vincents Cerberus 7/31/07 . chapter 1
Can you update this its really a good story.
shadowrunner65 7/31/07 . chapter 7
honestly man update NOW! OR AS SOON AS POSSIBLE, cause i'am startin to have a freakin anxciety attack here, don't lose a loyal reader to the grip of death by convolsions
XPD017 7/29/07 . chapter 1
I know this is your first attempt at fanfiction but honestly, don't use that as an excuse.

Just how many grammatical and spelling errors you have in this story, I've got no clue but it looks like you made at least a hundred.

Your characterizations are completely OFF, your scenes have no transitions or proper sense of time, and it looks like you seriously have no respect for women-I mean, look at how you portrayed Sakura: a slut who's willing to sell herself then accuse Naruto of rape? COME ON.

And the people who commend this story "as the best fic ever" clearly have no taste.
Tana 7/29/07 . chapter 3
Wow... you're a fucking retarded. kthxbi
scione 7/26/07 . chapter 7
not bad at all.
Helix King 7/19/07 . chapter 7
Well...grammer is shit in some parts, alright in the others. This last chapter was pretty crappy, Shizune wouldn't just realize what she had done and want forgiveness.

How did you come up with Sarah of all things to name the queen of hell?

The chapters are a bit too short, and the chapters with songs had little interaction in them. Get a better layout for the story, other then these complaints, I like the story. SO update.
trogdor0071 7/15/07 . chapter 7
Good story, keep it up.

I look forward to reading the rest of it.

:)
GrimMalice 7/14/07 . chapter 7
Good story update soon.
kyunaru 7/13/07 . chapter 7
different but good story i guess never read anything like it that's for sure.
hibiki96 7/12/07 . chapter 7
Alright, update! Nice chapter! I liked the demon-whore thing, lol! (And despite capitalization errors, I'm thoroughly enjoying it) Update soon!
Death Incarnate 7/12/07 . chapter 7
great to see this updated again, nice chapter too but it needs to be longer.

Please update soon
Azndrifter25 7/12/07 . chapter 7
Plz don't kill Shizune, well kill Sakura after delivering his child but plz it's too bad that Naruto will never know the truth after his one way trip to hell and back thanks to his mother and the pink haired hoe.
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