Cute story!

No offense but please add spaces between words.

moremoremoremoremore!

This is rushed and the grammar is bad. So is the spelling! THIS STORY IS GOOD THOUGH!

When Hinata's mother dies,her father blames hinata.That its her fault her mother died,because she wasnt strong or talented enough.To make matters worse he ends up telling her that he disownes her,that he never wants to see her around the home.Afer hinata runs of crying naruto comes and starts a fight with Hinata's father.(he was listeing to the whole thing.)

After Naruto tries to go after her,he ends up seeing he's freinds.He askes if any of them seen Hinata,they said none of them seen her(He ends up telling them about what happen.)

hinata hears footsteps ahead of her,she finds out it was naruto.hinata walkes up to naruto but he pulls hinata into a hug.hinata soon stops sobbing but her tears still flowed down her face.naruto wipes hinata tears away,he tells what happen.naruto tells hinata she can stay with him,she was so happy.after hinata and naruto find out there freinds were watching,they both blushed.when hinata finds out tenten was records them she goes (like when sakura gets mad at naruto when does something stupid).hinata ends up getting the tap and putting it in her pocket,after awile everyone leaves.

hinata starts a journal/diary about things that happen while she is with Naruto.

(fix it later)

lots and lots of songs

:D

alot of spelling mistakes like:

Naruto was about hit him but Hinata hold him back

HELD him back

thats just one of the many, but i enjoy this

good job!

Great story, keep up the good work!

OMG OMG OMG OMG!

Updates soon!

I just found this storu today, but that was too late! I should have found it years ago!

AH

NEED MORE!

this chapter is really good, it erased my fears of this story becoming too happy-go-lucky.

*sob*please continue the story...*sob*

it was amazing

I CANT WAIT!

My Immortal! Perfect song!

Me want more please!

Hope you update soon, can't wait to see how Naruto makes it up to Hinata.