Aw Joa I loved this. I love Alex and how you made her vunerable. It's really wonderful look at her. Btw, it's me Jess hehe.

i like it.it's great.

Ooh, that was lovely, so very perfectly _Alex_. Awesome, awesome fic.

The bad thing about one-shots is they are too short. I really loved/appreciated the way you described Jalex. It's what I imagine their relationship, which is so underdeveloped on the show, to be. It was all very realistic, and even though I don't ship Palex, I do think you captured their relationship as well. The formatting took some getting used to, but it fits in an odd way, stream of consciousness that's sharp and interesting, like Alex herself. Loved it. Keep writing, because you're good at it. Nikki

My faithful reivewer has finally posted some Palex.

And not JUST Palex.

GOOD Palex - which is way harder to find. Loved the "you" format, because when done correctly it can be better than first person or third could ever hope to be. Somehow way more personal. The emphasis on Alex's childhood was cool, I especially liked how you managed to bring us through her entire life (up until Lexicon) in just a oneshot. But way you kept bringing Emily's boyfriends into such significant light got kind of repetitive. Then again, they DO play a large part in this, it explains how she grew up into the person she is and why she deals with things the way she does. Insightful, even. That was just my being constructive. If it makes you feel better I had to re-read this piece to find something to ** about.

There were a lot of subtle things you did here - lines you added, vocab, descriptions - that really helped make this feel authentic. Totally Alex. Liked the fair representation of Jalex (a lot of Palex-lovers tend to blow Jay up into a big constant jerk and I don't really aggree. He's only a big jerk sometimes). It was kinda bittersweet and that's good. The Palex-mentions were cool because they seemed so In The Moment (capitalization for emphasis) and it's like Alex could totally be feeling that. I'm not sure if I'm entirely coherent anymore, but I'm almost done. I really loved the way this was written, the flow, the format: how it's all current, even though you manage to keep it moving. And even if you did go a little overboard with the ellipses I LIKE ellipses so it didn't really bother me. Kinda added to the mood, I guess.

A great job, over all.

Regards,
-Orange

That was written really well. Even though I despise Palex just because Jalex is so darn perfect. And the whole Jalex portion made it all worth while. Cute story.

You totally nailed this! Alex's characterization is spot on. The formatting is a bit hard to get used to, but it really suits the story. I like the description of Jay and Alex, and why their relationship fit so well. Good job!

I like this. It's not structured like most stories, it's kinda broken up...which works, and that's way cool. Of course, I'm biased because I do love Alex =]