FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination
| FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| ThirteenParrots 2007-05-03 ch 3,  | abuseReally good story so far, every is well described and easily brings images to your mind. The two main characters so are likable and interesting. The paragraphs need to be broken up a bit, mainly to help show better who is actually speaking. Otherwise great story so far and keep up the good work. Look forward to more parts of this story. |