I have just recently finished reading this fine story! Homeworld stories featuring multiple characters and intertwining plots, like this one and Legacies, are what I feast on; and it was a fine feast at that! You ceartainly have a talent for writing, and I am itching to read the sequal.

Good job!

-Killerblonde

I must say, this is an EXCELLENT story. I noticed a few errors in capitolizing names of cultures, and Kiith Somtaaw got the name Beast SLAYER, (not Killer,) but other than that, it is flawless. I will use this as a standard when I write my Homeworld fanfiction.

Oh dear.

I see what you mean with paragraph issues. Indeed, has swallowed my paragraph - but foremost the indents/tab-spaced paragraphs that allow the reader to distinguish two different plots flowing at the same time :(

I hope I can fix this, as this issue really confuses the hell out of any reader. I will see if I can add symbols.

Well that took a while to read...

This was truely an excellent fic to read and I do look forward to part two.

The space battles got better as the fic progressed and I appluad your sense of detail in the ships you created as well as used from the previous Homeworld games.

I liked you main character as well as your other OCs and they have a real sense in creativity to them. Your main character seemed real to me and I could picture her quite well in my head.

The only issue I had was the format of the chapters where you had some of the paragraphs and speech lines to jumbled up; otherwise it was not that hard to read.

Once again, great fic and I look very forward to part 2!

Well it took a while but I have to say that this was one hell of a fic so far and promise more reviews as I cotinue to read.

I like it! Very descriptive, good characters, and an excellent intro all 'round. I just wonder what that ship is at the end...

I love this story. I just keep coming back to see if there is more and sadly there isn't :( but it is addictive i have read it 3 or 4 times and still amazed. I especially loved how you described the girls passion about her homeworld and her faith.

I literally was about to cry.