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Reviews for: Spiderman: Shocked Revised Version
trecebo
2007-04-04 . chapter 1
Glad to see you out and about again, ToB. Nice pacing, rapid one liners, and lots of action. Good stuff.

You might want to change groin to groan. Kinda makes the sentence have a whole different feel... :P
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