   Crysal1010
2008-02-14 . chapter 9I Have some plot guidelines! :D But I'm not including introductions, details, or names in them.
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When Tails gets in the room, the kids stare at him; his tails, actually. One of them says, "Look! That foxy'th got two tailth!" as he points at Tails's waving tails. All the children start running up to him, but he can't move due to Amy and Rouge holding his arms. "No, Wait! STOP!" Tails says as the children run behind him and start cuddling his tails. Tails blushes as the children snuggle his tails. "S...Stop it! Stop!" Tails says as his eyelids feel heavy. People massaging his tails relaxes him, and he can't break free of Amy and Rouge's grasps. "...Stop..." Tails says as he closes his eyes and sighs. Amy and Rouge let go of him, and he slumps, his eyes still closed. Sonic and the others come into the room. Rena spots the children massaging Tails's tails. "Aww... Tails likes it when others massage his tails, but he doesn't want to admit it, even if the rest of his body does." Rena says as she giggles uncontrollably. "I just love seeing that, Tails looks so cute!" Rena says as she continues to giggle. Tails was still blushing, and the children were still snuggling his tails. "...Stop..." Tails just barely manages to say as he falls over forwards, somewhat catching himself with his hands, before they collapse. Amy and Rouge start to giggle themselves, watching Tails fall over in ectasy like that. After a while, the children stop massaging his tails, and as he gets up, He hears giggling around him. He turns around and sees the females giggling at him. His eyes become wide, and his blush reddens. "N-nobody saw that, r-right?" Tails stammers as he waves his hands in front of him. Sonic, grinning mananically, starts to giggle uncontrollably himself, causing the females to stop giggling so hard and look at him. "Hehe-ahem..." Sonic says stopping his giggling as a look of nervousness, completed with a blush forms on his face. The females look back at Tails, who's blush was larger now. "Oh you ARE the cute one Tails!" Amy said before her giggling escalated into laughter as she doubled over. "...I..." Tails said as his blushed reddened again. "Want more of that, don't you Tails?" Said a voice behind him. He turned his head, to see Knuckles, a mischevious grin plastered on his face. Tails jumped backwards. "D-Don't you even thi-" Tails said, before he felt hands clasp onto his tails. He yelped, and jumped a bit forwards, before turning around, to see Amy and Rouge with that same look plastered on their faces. Tails backed into a corner, his arms out to the sides as his blush was growing wider by the minute. Everyone began to walk torwards him, the same look on their faces. "D-Don't come near m-me! N-No! Stay away! No! NO! NO!" Tails cried out as he was swallowed by everyone.
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MUAHAHAHAHAHA!! >:D I love doing that! Well, anyway, feel free to modify this in any way you want, but give me credit for the plot if you actually use it. Okay?
Hope ya liked mah guidelines! They're for a cute-humor chapter, just to give everyone a break from the seriousness, or maybe I did it cuz I love embarrasing Tails. >>:D
Tails will never live that down! Well, at least not in this story. |
 ShortyMcPopTart
2007-04-25 . chapter 2I've read the first two chapters. Grammar's good, story's... well, not original, but good...
But in come the bad... very bad fancharacters. First off, a mysterious girl finds Tails and immediately knows that she can trust him. Very unoriginal, very uninteresting, and VERY Mary-Sue-ish.
And Maria Robotnik. Dear. God. Why? And WHY, pray tell, does she have the EXACT same description as a fancharacter with the EXACT same name on DeviantART?
Well, other than those two... things... I can't find anything wrong with your story. A few aspects to be improved, of course... but nothing bad. You're a good writer. ;D |
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