I'll keep an eye out since you didnt finish this. Usually people finish the first story before doing a sequel but you seem to want to finish this with a sequel. Interestin and frustrating...

okay. That bit about family and revenge is one thing I will argue. Not everyone wants violent revenge for someone harming a loved one. Trust me, a corrupt cop murdered my father and got away with murder yet I didnt grab a gun and kill his **. The point is it has to do with a person's control and personality. Not his connection to the force. When Jedi learn...life, I will respect them.

Wow, didn't expect that to happen! I like all of the twists this story is taking, there's honestly no way to tell where you're headed next! I'm really interested to see how you tie up all these loose ends, keep it up =)

Mm, very nice. I like the ties with the already established Star Wars characters, it makes the story a bit more coherent when introducing new characters. I'm really interested in where you're taking this, and keep up the good work =)

very interesting story you have here, I'm rather intrigued. I like the different take you have on the True Sith idea by introducing your own character, it adds a lot more to the story. I like what you have so far and I hope you update soon!

ALL HAIL THE FORCE!

SW RULES! GO KOTOR! I'll keep reading tommorow...trust me!

To: D.R.B.
Friday, April 20, 07.

I've read chapter three, and enjoyed it. I liked how you worked in the crystal caves. It was an important part of the game plot, that the Exile could feel Reven, and that he/she (Exile) wondered at what future Jedi would think and feel at his own presence, left behind within the crystal and the Force.
My only concern with this chapter was the sudden increase in the danger surrounding the community. From the fact that the kids are allowed to wander and play on their own, one can infer that the people feel that its fairly safe now. But you have Sith or Dark Jedi in the previous chapter, and in this one, both bounty hunters' /mercenaries and the Kinraths.
I see the need for these events, the bounty hunters and Kinraths, to get both the Disciple and Allera into the caves, so that they can feel the past presence in the Force. And maybe to lead the local community into having Jedi nearby (the kids having seen what Allera and the Disciple did, will carry tales back to their homes).
But with the past chapters danger of the Sith, would Kin-Su have been allowed to go out and play, unwatched. Why were the kids anywhere near the Kinrath caves, since apparently this danger is an old and continuing one?
I hope that these observations don't slow your writing. I did and do enjoy this story, and continue to watch it for updates. Good luck with your exams. My sister is taking hers now, and is becoming more and more, not sure what the right word is, but crazy would be a good starting point. So I can understand how such stress would slow you down. Still, I look forward to more chapters.
Till the next chapter.
Sincerely,
Luke Reed.

i like this story so far, please update soon!

To: D.R.B.

Your story, from what I have see of it, in its first two chapters, is quite interesting.
I like what you have done with the game worlds, and what I have seen of the characters. Though I will admit that I never played with the Disciple as part of my group, I always played a male character, and got the Handmaiden. It's also nice to see where Dantooine would have gone after the Jedi left, what would have become of the developing civilization (the people seemed to be pulling together, when the Jedi left, but from the game its hard to tell where they would have gone from there).
Your writing style is nice and quite clear. Forgive any appearance of comparison, for there is none, but many of the stories I have read on FanFiction are terrible, little better then rough outlines of a story, pretending to be more. If they are that good. Your story has structure, it is well balance between description, and dialog, making easy to read, and yet quite enjoyable. From what I have read so far, you are doing a good job at bringing out the characters, making them, and the worlds they live in, real.
I compliment your work, and look forward to seeing more chapters in this story. Good luck with it, and I hope you find as much enjoyment in writing it, as at least I did in reading it. I look forward to seeing where you take this story, since so far, I can't really see where you plan to take the story, so I have just enjoyed what was there.
Sincerely,
Luke Reed.