I hate to say it bro, but most of this chap is kinda off. It feels like its "not real". By that I mean that Coby and Lori aren't speaking in any normal sense. Feels like some of the words they're using are "off" and "not right". Like when Coby is talking about how a baby is developing. He uses words that are too "politically correct" when "normal" words could work. Saying "Female" instead of "woman" just seemed off.

Now on to the contest. I don't quite understand the rules.

A little more detail would of been nice in certain places. Like how and where Red Alert accessed Uranium's internal communicators, would of been nice.

When you said that Hot Rod and the others "evacuated" the population, does that mean just for a city, or sector of the planet, or the whole thing? The first 2 I can believe, but not the last one.

Since SO many ppl are either hurt or dead, i don't see WHY Nitro Convoy would have such a problem asking for help. Are his "ball bearings" too big for him to ask for help or something?

One last thing. Why would Red Alert think that Jetfire is going to interfere with what he has going on? If he let his wife out of her cell, he would NEED someone's jurisdiction to do so. He's ONLY a medbot, so he's not cleared to do so. If he did let his wife out on his own, then he could very well end up in that cell. is he REALLY going to risk that? Oh and when did we find out Coby and Lori' were having a son? I thought it was just a kid and no one knew the gender yet?

Well, another update.

I saw some problems here and there, so I'll just tell you what they were, and hopefully you can clear them up for me.

I don't see how Sky Shadow could be so causal with Nemesis Prime. he should be slightly intimidated. Besides, the way Nemesis Prime is, he would let someone who's NOT afraid of him, work for him. He kinda gets off on fear.

The way the "beasties" split during the worst time possible, seems to fit them just right, but you gave no reason for the others to leave. That doesn't add up. Were the Giants being asked to make weapons? I have NO idea why the "speedsters" didn't stay.

Would you mind helping me out there Saber?

I'm liking the killer suspense in this chapter. ^_^

Is it because Galaxy Convoy is currently indisposed?

This is why I will never get into politics.

So the Decepticons were behind the fission of the Alliance.

Is anyone else scared by what Emily might do?

Why did Coby call Jetfire a traitor? He was just doing his job. That hardly makes him a traitor.

I guess Starscream has more than just 1 good quality to him LOL! No drinking. Didn't know the big guy was so "clean" with his body.

If they're going to war, then I want to see Skywarp fight Thundercracker. Battle of the giant arm cannons!

OMG! Optimus is GALACTUS?! He's Unicron! Stop him B4 he eats us all! ROFLMAO!

Sorry bout that, kinda just came out.

I don't see how him being imprisoned would lead to a civil war. Sure things wold be bad, but the TF running the Alliance are smart enough to stop a civil war from braking out. I just don't see that happening.

I hate (not really:) to admit it, but i agree with teh Human Liberation. Now, won't Vanessa be happy? LOL!

Glad to see you've updated again Saber. I'll be sure to check out ur profile pics.

Awesome job on the chapters you posted. ^_^

I can't wait to read the next ones, good luck on them and on your other stories too.

This isn't gonna end well is it.

ok are you haveing major writers block or what? if you need any ideas just ask.