 Tristan-the-dreamer 2008-02-12 . chapter 1 Dude, that was wack. One punch is fatal? Sensitive guy. There were a couple grammar issues, minor, like when the queen says not to worry, there's no comma after the "dear." I would make it "...dear," but that's just me. Funny, I would say! I liked it when he said, don't panic, and there was panic in his voice! lolz. Well, ciao for now. |