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Dark Duchess and Shadow Que...
2007-05-02
ch 7,
abuseAWESOME! u should have it that ichigo comes through right where rukia and matsumoto r and rukia is so suprised... she hugs him. then matsumoto will never shut up about about it!
Toshiro-kun
2007-05-02
ch 7,
abuseMath?! You actually put in Mr. G's math...i don't know you anymore Kuchiki. Anyways waht do you mean by brainfreeze?! Your doing just fine! I still like this story. Now i finally have an idea what im going to do for mine. Random ?: Is international day May 18 cuz thats coming up?
SoDanielle
2007-05-01
ch 7,
abuseI'm a sucker for great Ichi/Ruki interactions and this story is excelling at that...

But the Hitsugaya missing plot kinda mucks things up. If you do decide to continue with the story, the next chapter should mention him from his POV, even if it's just a few sentences. If he is in Hueco Mundo has someone captured him?

...and this is my crackiness fighting through my attempt at serious plot forming, but maybe he lost something that he's really attached to during the war, so he's going through the desert on his own to look for it...and it's way too embarrasing to ask for help and when he senses that Jushiro (who would coddle him like a child to no end if he found out what it was) Matsumoto (who would spill his secret over sake with people like renji, ikakku, yumichika, and hisagi) and Rukia (who would tell Ichigo...who just irks him) he freaks out and starts hiding from them...

...that popped into my head as soon as I read that you wanted help with the plot. But this is how my brain works... so yeah.

I could help with developing a serious kidnapping plot if you wanna continue on with this story. You can just PM me whenever.

Or you can use my crack plot. It could be part of a security blanket he had as a child or something childish that he would be deathly ashamed of.

and, as far as /this/ chapter goes, it was really well written. I don't think I caught any typos and everyone seemed in character.

hope i helped some and/or can help in the future.

(hopefully the crackiness didn't muddle up your mind; i'm already used to it XD)

-SoDanielle
Ranma Matsuri
2007-05-01
ch 6,
abuseHmm... didn't take like 3 days to open that portal?... or am i thinkin about somethun else?...

Ah well, update soon!
SoDanielle
2007-04-15
ch 6,
abuseooh! is ichigo gonna join up with Rukia's group?! ...matsumoto's bound to create plenty of awkward moments. Jushiro would to...he just gives off that clueless father vibe. (but i still love him!)

i'm really enjoying this, but the short chapters are killing me.

hope you update soon!
-AnGeLiCaNiMeKiTtY-
2007-04-14
ch 5,
abusehmm... a short one... but it was interesting...
-AnGeLiCaNiMeKiTtY-
2007-04-14
ch 4,
abusehe misses her... that was so cute and well she was the same... cute...
Troy Thomas
2007-04-14
ch 2,
abuse> “I know, head. I haven’t been doing this for a gazillion years for nothing.” He focused on the Hollow’s head and jumped up. Then he swung and chopped its arm off neatly.

> “I thought you said you knew to aim for the head.”

> “Calm down, geez. I’m just playing around with it for a bit.”

I don't see Ichigo ever 'playing around' with Hollows. He knows Hollows are actually people, and not monsters. He actually cares about them and would 'purify' (cutting apart the Hollow's mask with a Zanpakutou) them as quickly as possible.

But that's just my two cents, so ignore if you disagree.
SoDanielle
2007-04-08
ch 4,
abuseAww...poor Keigo. But suppose a guy like Ichigo needs a human punching bag every now and then. (Sometimes plushies aren't enough for most people...)

I still love how they both miss each other. And I'm curious to see what shinigami the Hitsugaya search party will consist of and why Rukia is needed...

Update soon!
-AnGeLiCaNiMeKiTtY-
2007-04-08
ch 3,
abuseokay now i'm happy again... so I hope you'd update soon...
SoDanielle
2007-04-07
ch 3,
abuse...i feel bad for ichigo, missing rukia so much. it's sweet though.

and kon is totally in character; i'm surprised he hasn't really pulled a stunt like that yet.

there were no gramatical errors (that i caught) and all of your characters are...in character. You're doing a great job!
Shinigami3414
2007-04-06
ch 2,
abuseOff to a good stop, cant wait for the next update.
-AnGeLiCaNiMeKiTtY-
2007-04-06
ch 2,
abusei'll probably read on... but Renji and Rukia holding hands... I think I'm gonna barf... and ichigo and orihime on a date... I suppose... if Kon slips in his body when ichigo goes in a temporary coma
-AnGeLiCaNiMeKiTtY-
2007-04-05
ch 1,
abusethis seems promising... update soon...
Twilight's Blade
2007-04-04
ch 1,
abusewell, its not that bad... but when u use japanese words that arent heard often in the show, its nice to put the definition. also, it might be best to get up to the problem in the 1st chapter to hook ur readers in. other than that, the characters are well... in character, so thats good. and it was kinda funny! don't worry you'll get better
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