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| TiaRat 2007-04-12 ch 1,  | abuseI really liked the story and the character of Marie. But I felt like things were happening too fast, especially between chapters. I think it might read better if it was broken into more chapters when the scene or action changes. I ould also like to get to know a little more about Marie by seeing how she acts with the regular characters before we get into her story. |