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Good story. There's one thing I don't get though. It makes no sense that House would sleep on a park bench?

I read this cos YOU wrote it. Everything you touch is pure midas baby! LOL. love the way you keep everything in the way canon for the characters personality, but still able to bring your own style through so powerfully. loved it!

Amazing story. I loved it from beginning till end. Unfortunately I have seen much too many children like Thomas in my life, you've portrayed his trauma and healing wonderfully. 5*

Kind regards,

Ves.

Good story maybe you can do a follow up story to it

Wonderful ending, I am happy for the happiness! :)

Very good

i am glad house is happy :)

hmm...interesting developments

His eyes narrowed and his jaw locked for a moment. "I may be a jerk, an ass and many other select words you like to choose and I know you think I lack morals but I do have some. I wouldn't force you to have sex with me." Every word was clipped and edged with hints of anger and frustration.

Same problem here: Maybe try " but you don't think I would actually force you to have sex with me."

Love your story so far! Very talented. One problem I had with this chapter though:

"You mean I'm not looking at one right now?"

Ouch, that one hurt. However, the Dean of Medicine didn't show her hurt and threw an insult right back at him.

"You're a first class bastard."

"First class bastard with style."

"You wish you had style."

This just doesn't seem like it fits- the bantering doesn't match the characters well; I can't picture either of them saying that. Maybe it's just too childish, even for House... Also: In just about every episode I've seen, House always gets the last comeback.

Keep Writing! I hope that helps.

interesting storyline

Cool. *lol* Just last night I was complaining and today, vòila!

Great that your story found such fine ending. (Though I loved the last scene of chap10 already!) Very sweet, very *oh-don't-we-all-wish-it-would've-been-something-l ike-that* and, very big fun too, like the fantastic way you picked up their vibe or, House's bit with Wilson in the end, nice idea *lol* I'm only maybe a bit frustrated about UST! :-D *lol* but anyways, perfect House story. thanx. (-:

glad everything worked out. Good ending.

Aww I loved the ending :-)