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anime sci-fi chick book lover
2008-05-17 . chapter 7
*sniff* *tear* wow...
Beautiful...
Whyt Wulf
2008-03-08 . chapter 1
Wow, that's a crazy take! I like it . . .
DruidLass
2007-04-29 . chapter 7
Noo, I can't believe its over! And Jayne died *whimpers*. At least, that's how I read it... Little confused on the ending.

You are totally amazing at creating incredible imagery with just a few words. I, myself, am far too wordy at times!! I love your work!

"Eyes, clear for only moments, clouded over again and she watched his soul shatter with a force that drove him to his knees." "Now, in the rush of battle, he was not simply riding the fight, he was a prism, amplifying, reflecting, refracting her." - Best lines ever!!

Thanks for the wonderful read. Can't wait for your next stuff!

-Druid
nubesdelchocolate
2007-04-29 . chapter 7
I was just waiting for the end of this before I reviewed, but I loved the whole thing. You put so much emotion and plot into so few words, it was very beautiful.
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 7
This was a really great and definitely interesting and worthwhile series of drabbles, White Silence. I didn't quite get the end, but it was wonde4ful anyway.

Please write more Firefly, preferably involving River, Jayne,and or Reavers. It's so interesting! Anyway, thanks for the excellent fic! :D
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 6
More action-y chap, very good. I can't wait for the last one! Off to read it now, btw, did I say that you were a good writer ever, cuz you really are. It's hard to get these feelings and perfect little chapters into 100 words like you have done, very nice job!
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 5
"River stared at Jayne’s mutilated face, all their sorrow crashing over her and knew that she had no right to ask him, gave that up when she left him for dead but she would anyway." - Wow, perfect lines, I liked that part a lot.

Again, I say - Poor Jayne! I really want to bring Reavers into my Lost/Firefly crossover fic I'm working on right now, but I'm not sure how I'll do it yet. :D
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 4
Great job. Need...to go...read next chap...so exciting!

LOL
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 3
How sad as always! I don't really adore Rayne or anything, but you make me sad in this fic and I like them here! :D

"But that instant was enough to sear her mind with all the pain and anguish he had felt when he’d been left behind, everything he’d done since then." - Wow, powerful line. Nice job!

Off to read the next chap!
SassyLostie
2007-04-29 . chapter 2
Wow, I didn't know that you had more, I lvoe fics that include Reavers and these short, drabbles are awesome. Great job! :D

"Time passed in a haze of red. He hurt everyone and everything, trying to drive away the pain and betrayal that overwhelmed him and when that wasn’t enough, he cut himself instead. Then one day, he threw a body against a metal bulkhead but instead of looking away, familiar brown eyes met his angry blue ones.

River?"

The whole last part was amazing, which was really have the chapter, but oh well, I had to quote it. so well written, so sad. Poor Jayne! I'll continue to review! :)
wyntertwilight
2007-04-29 . chapter 7
WHAT?! *mouth falls open in shock* Major sadness! I understand why, but it still hurts. Poor Jayne, and poor River. Great little series White Silence, I was really impressed with the amount of emotion and intensity you conveyed through such a small amount of words. Wonderful work!
wyntertwilight
2007-04-29 . chapter 6
Wow, amazing piece - probably one of the best so far. I don't know why exactly it "clicked" for me but I really liked the description of Jayne in the fight. Brilliant!
wyntertwilight
2007-04-26 . chapter 5
YAY! Jayne might be saved yet - I don't know HOW he's going to come back from being a Reaver but helping kill the others might be a good start. I'm looking forward to reading about the two of them pairing up to fight. Good work!
wyntertwilight
2007-04-26 . chapter 4
Ooh, interesting. I like the line "broke through the haze in his mind like sunlight through a winter storm." It shows that there's still some hope for Jayne! I like the fact that her guilt shocked him, because I can imagine it must be really powerful. Woot! Awesome bit.
DruidLass
2007-04-26 . chapter 5
Sqe, you updated!! I am in awe of your ability to paint such an incredibly vivid picture with so few words! I love it. Yay, Jayne's getting saner!! My poor baby, I still can't believe you reavered him! At least he's getting better. I loved his reaction to River pushing her thoughts into his head. Can't wait for the next parts!! -Druid
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