=( (wimper) you made me sad. . . (bottom lip trembles) WAH! *sniff* Hug my pillow, hug my pillow. . .

OMG! I really liked this chapter! It was AWSOME!! Update very VERY soon please!

that's sad. and, as i'm me, what's Sam's side of the story? and Dan's?

*add's to C2*,
brittney

Wow..

This was REALLY great! Totally fantastic, I loved it.

Peace!

Kenna

Poor everyone!! :'( I luved it! Absolutley luved it!! Can't wait till the next one!! Update very VERY soon please!

Nice start. Here is my constructive critisism review. It needs some more detail. I don't mind it starting in the sad situation, but it needs more detail in it. It seems like its being rushed some. The summary should be about the story, not warning about its saddness. Overall interesting story. Hope you aren't offended by this review, cause that is not what I intended. Anyway, I'd be interested in seeing how this develops thoughout its further chapters.

Okay it is sad but I didn't cry shocking, I know.
I think you could have made it a little bit longer, although You done excellent on detail & describing the characters emotion -Wondergirl101

Ok, normally I don't review a lot. But I have to get things off my chest about this fanfiction. Here's my construction criticism:

1. You need to develop a firm plotline. I know these are one shots, but don't just jump into the "sad" situation. Familiarize the reader with the character more (make sure we know the character in the story not the TV series), because 700+ words aren't going to give the reader time.

2. For your summary, dont just say "this is the saddest thing you'll ever read." Yes, it is sad, but doing so will make people disappointed because in all honesty, this not sad. It was, but it didn't make me want to cry. So it was a big turn off, as was the capitalized letters (which were obnoxious, in my opinion). Telling people what to expect like "Situations come up involving D/S/T/V." (w/out capitalizing every letter) That will catch the readers attention..

Those are my two major issues with this story. This is criticism and ways to improve and you can choose to ignore it or not.

(In all honesty, I would rate this fanfiction 3/10, ten being the highest and best rating.)

~Punker88