The one part I liked the most of this chapter was the scene of Kim nearly dying, followed by her in the car. Dunno why, but the image of Kim falling assleep like that seemed really cute.

Futhersome, I like how you're giving, for the most part, equivalent "screentime" to both Kim and Shego, although this one chapter had a bit more of Kim. Regardless, 'cause the more I analyse the character and see her potential, the more I'm liking her.

By the way, regarding the scene of Drakken forcing Ron to eat, was that one of the images in the game? 'Cause if it was, that's one I didn't unlock.

Not really much to say about this chapter, although, for some reason, I'm not sure how, but I think it could have been better. Anyway. Gotta keep reading. See ya later

Third review this time (Second on this page) and, well, let's list things through.

Starting with Shego, I must say I kinda like your portrayal of her, specially because of the scene in which she seemed to be even enjoying the battle against the coper.
In the same vein, however, I couldn't help but to notice Camille getting mentioned again. It's like every time Shego got an scene, there got to be a way to link it to Camille, and this almost gives an impression of Camille being the only one important for Shego (You're not a Camille/Shego shipper, are you?). Also, I'm always in for character developing, but I can't help but to feel that you're upgrading Camille too much (And she's not even around!). Nothing against her character, really, although I suppose I should read that other fic of tours with Shego and Camille before assuming much.

Now regarding Kim, I couldn’t help but to feel that the part of she questioning herself was totally out of place. For starting, I feel like just making herself those questions is a bit out of character of her because, based on how she acts in the show, I can take she already know the answer to those questions and has her mind made up, making it the reason of her life to save the world and help others. Besides, of all the moments, that one seemed hardly the correct one to start thinking about those things.

In the end, the thing in which we’re clashing is just matter of opinion, but I hope you take my words not just as a critic, but as a good one. I think you’re pretty good writer and seriously, hope to see more of you after reading this fic.

The rest of the fic looks just fine. Nice to keep watching on Drakken and Ron, and the twist of the Kimmunicator getting broken at the end was great. Now I want to see Kim handling this.

See ya in next review.

Had I know you had an account here I would have left the first review around here too.

Now, once again catching up with this novelization...

For starting, I gotta congratulate you for one excellent thing in this fic: The organization. This chapter alone was enough to show me how you're handling the diverse elements of the game to make a very interesting story, for example, the two short scene of Drakken and Ron based on some of the pics we could see about them.

Kim leaving her car behind but grabbing her hear. Shego having the hovercraft shot down and going on from there. That's a what I'm meaning. Good work in those. Also, I think it was an amazing idea to hint about the upcoming robot with that newspaper article.

Also, really nice in-deep on Shego this time with "The Guild". Sounds fitting for her, although I'd think it twice about the thought of her never doing anything criminal on her own free will. However, I really like this element of the story, and I think it's something I would like to see more, it deserves to be more explored.

On the other hand, there are two things I got to critic here. The first one: Shego's powers. What we got about those in the game was, if anything, evidence that the programmers didn't care too much in the details. Considering Shego's powers had absolutely no role on the history, I don't see a reason good enough like to put them here as it's like a contradiction to the show itself. I think it would have been much better to stick with the well-known powers.

Second, well, I'm NOT asking for KiGo, but at least for some respect for the relationship between Kim and Shego. They have more than once worked together in the show, without giving it a second thought, but here they are outraged at the idea. Honestly, considering the even friendly chat they have now and then in the show, do you really think this would be their reaction?

Anyway. Overall, the fic is going really nice, and I'm looking forward for whatever it's coming. So see ya in next review.

great story, i enjoyed reading it.

'Kay, 'cause you got the last three chapters up all at once pretty much (which totally ruled), I'm just gonna drop one last review. THAT WAS AWESOME. I dunno how much the game really influenced this (since I don't have it...yet), but I DO know, your version is probably way better. If I do get the game, I'll probably be disappointed by it after reading this.

Ah, well, not sure how to take the last chapter into account, but I do know I loved the teamwork you put between Kim and Shego. Oh, and I loved the little references to Stop Team Go...that's my fave epi so far, even if Shego did act a little...erm...weird.

And Drakken and Ron were everly cute put together. I went all teary-eyed when Ron was all 'but I don't want to lose you'. And the karaoke/dancing thing, hilarious. Ooh, and Camille's part in the story was awesome, too.

I'm definitely looking forward to more of your writing. Don't stop writing, ever.
~Jelly Bean

This is so awesome! I love it how you keep making Shego refer back to her heroine days:D Argh, and it ends at a cliffie:D Update soon, please!
~Jelly Bean

cool chap, but what were you trying to say with "ach du liebein"?

I completely agree with you regarding Wade's influence on Shego's powers in the game - no way could he do that.

I'm really enjoying the story so far, and I eagerly await your next installment.

Im luvin this story so far its great plz update soon! PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ!

Oh, angsty battle ax! I can't wait for the next chapter!

mangafangirl ^_^

cool so far, don´t have the game myself so this will be cool to read

Hahahaha. This is good. I was thinking about getting the game, but by the looks of it, it kind of sucks...at least I can check out the story from your version of the Kim Possible game. Can't wait to see more chapters! Update soon!

~GB