Better written than most intentional Mary Sues out there. Of course, it still made my head hurt. I'm going to get myself some bourbon.

Jesus.

Got about three paragraphs in before I had to bang my head on a desk. Good job. It's truly startling to see such stereotypical fanfiction crap in a piece that is actually quite well written. (As your stuff usually is, am a big fan of the Alexis Finch stories.)

Poor, poor Jigen.

Derringer in his hat? X-ray contacts? Despite a healthy vocabulary and my facility with the language, I'm not sure I have a word to describe just how bad this story really is. Though it is a wonderful parody. I think the best thing I can say is that this is horrible. And by 'horrible,' I mean... I think you know what I mean.

I love your writing, dear, but I hate your story.
Nicely done, just the same.

Wow. It's so sickeningly sappy, and with Jigen, no less. It's like a gruesome car wreck by the side of the road, so horrible to behold, but I just can't tear my eyes from it. It almost inspires fits of wanton eyeball-tearing. Almost.

I wonder how you could get that out of Hello Nurse? I always found that song kind of boring, but I guess it does have that "She's everything and more" thing you're making fun of, eh?

I was kind of hesitant to read, but it is a good parody, THANK GOD IT'S A PARODY!

Some people take these so seriously, it's sickening xD

I am liking the story a bit (the story, not the Mary-Sue) LOL. Anyways keep writing it, and it's very detailed and descriptive, very good! Sorry, gotta keep it short, class is almost starting, talk to you soon!

Owari, Amor, and amore!
"Ron, they kidnapped my papi!"
-El Cid Girl

OMG! I am sorry, but this fic is making me both rant and yell! LOL, but it is a bit funny and wrong. Sorry, but I am one of those fanfic authors who HATE Mary-Sues, and other authors who try to make the characters OOCish. That is why I am rewriting my fics, so I can avoid all that. But otherwise good plot line, if I wasn't a Mary Sue hater I'd support it, but I don't. The only thing I like about all, is that your honest about it, and have a good plot! ^^V

~*Owari, Amor, e Amore!*~
"I like chocolate milk!"
-El Cid Girl

I laughed. And then laughed again. This really has taken off, it kills me already. So cheesy, that it's rib-snappingly good. I've been trying to consider other cliches... I'll get back to you. But it seems that you have a great grasp on this so far. :P