 SylverEyes 2008-10-21 . chapter 1My favorite Avatar ship! Ah, you wonderful, wonderful person; it really isn't written enough, and even more rarely is it written well, so this was very nice to find, especially after reading that awesome Ouran story of yours. ^_^
This was very well thought out-- you seem to have created your own AU without actually making it AU. That sounds really weird and kind of crazy but it's true. So, Jet would now be gone forever right? Aw, that's so sad... I love him, and I don't want him to go. T_T
But he did what he had to, to save Aang. Which was surprisingly selfless, and yet not. Because I've always thought that his character was much deeper than a lot of people gave him credit for, even when he was still "evil". I think you've brought that out here, all of the different sides of him. And I could see why it would be so disorienting for Katara, because she sees the Jet that she knew when he was alive, the one she briefly caught a glimpse of when he was dying, and then the Jet that she had never seen but was always there. O_o I would be freaked out too.
Speaking of disorienting your writing style was so original. I've never read anything quite like it. It jumped around enough to throw someone if they weren't paying attention, but if they were, it made perfect sense. Almost like dream-writing, except I've read some of those and they're more... well, at any rate, it's not like anything I've ever read before. And I liked that, it was extremely creative.
I hope I'll be seeing more Jetara from you in the future! :D Or at least more Avatar, because you do it so well! |
 Omnicat 2008-06-13 . chapter 1Guh. Seriously... guh.
That was... that was... That stole all the words with any semblance of meaning right from my mind. I don't think anything I could say about this would do it justice.
I'm staring at the screen all boggly-eyed, so impressed? affected? I am. O_O
The only thing I can say is that the disorienting effect your writing had in places was very effective, and that your descriptions of Jet - especially "that blank, uneven stare" - conjured up such crystal clear images. This little gem makes the actual episodes look like unpolished coal in comparison.
GUH. |
 avatarlove 2007-12-23 . chapter 1What an amazing story! You are such a great writer. You are really detailed and descriptive in your writing. Hey, could you so me a favor? Go to my site,
and check out my writing. Would you mid rating it and telling me how it is so far? Also, is anything wrong with it? Your comments would mean a lot considering you are such a talented writer yourself. Thanks ;)
-Lauren (aka: avatarlove) |
 Winter Ashby 2007-04-13 . chapter 1That was really interesting. It was such a different kind of world, and you described it perfectly. Your language has gotten better and I see that you really understand Jet's character. I could totally hear him saying all those things in my head. And Katara was great too. I got a little confused right at the end, with the water. But I figured it out (I think). She took the oasis water from inside Jet and healed Aang. How sad! Kuddos points for the unbeleivable angst. I loved it. It was a great challange fic. I look foward to reading more avatar fics from you. ;)
-Ash |