awwe, this was cute!
so, is there going to be more?
i hope so!!
:D
xx

nice.. easy t read and pleasant!

Great start I can't wait for more you need to UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
Ther so aint enuf Balthier/Vaan fics out ther *pouts*

K.

yes yes please continue!

write more its really good! i wanna know what happens next! please! ^.^

ADORABLE! i love vaanbalthier, please continue theres not many good fics of them out there.

I got Balthier's way of speak just fine. Perfect even. I can totally see Vann screaming like a baby like that. I would like it to be longer, but that just it was so good. It ended nicely though. I look forward to your next chapter.

meh, UPDATE

petty good story :D for to be a yaoi one (i dont like yaoi so much) :D

nice!
it's really comfy to read...
i don't see the plot yet-
anyway, keep it up, and don't wait too long to update ya?

It's a pretty nice beginning of something that holds much promise :)

Just two small things :
I think a beta-reader/editor would be nice, since you have afew spelling mistakes.
Add a little more descriptions and it will all be nice and dandy :) Hope you'll continue this
Cheers,

Yay, I love ff12. Ok, I'll hint to you about Baltheirs personality. HE ACTS EXACTLY LIKE JACK SPARROW! lmao. And Vaan is like a mix of Cloud and Tidus. But much cooler then Tidus ofcourse. I play this game non-stop now. I will keep reading.

I would really love it if you continued!!

Please? Love it!

*Flys out of nowhere, and glomps Authoress* Squee!! ^^ I think... I love you... *tears up* It has a few spelling errors, and it was kind of short, but it shows promise!! Please continue!
... Or I won't love you anymore.

Cute.

I hate to be stick in the mud, but I just thought I'd help you out a little^^

There are a few spelling errors. Mainly just mistypes. Like, "beyong" should be "beyond" I'm sure. And also, Vaan seems to be overreacting a lot o-o;

Besides that, its ok so far^^ I hope you continue.

-tankar