I really like this. I'm not sure I like it as fanfiction per-say. more like an original story borrowing characters. But I really like it.

Failed? You think you *failed?* Sweetie, this is actually one of the best things I've ever read on this site. You obviously put a lot of hard work into it, because I know it probably isn't easy writing in a Fight Club way. Unless it is. Anyway, I have a short attention span when it comes to reading fanfiction, so if the opening doesn't grab me I can't continue to read. However, the entire story kept my eyes glued to the screen, and I couldn't stop reading until it ended. Overall, it was actually pretty epic. You made a crack pairing work so that it honestly felt like it could be canon. Great job. You should write in this style again. Fight Club and Kingdom Hearts are an amazing mix.

heart.erratic

Well, I think that it was sweet. Really, that's how I would describe it. I'm awfully relieved about Kairi not dying, and I liked it. A bit odd, but enjoyable. Pretty good.

You. Rock. On this site, there is barely enough of this pairing, but this is definately one of the best I've read yet. I love how you portrayed Demyx, too. Great story, thanks for sharing it!

I don't like Kairi pairings, you know that, but this was wonderful. Constance, I love your metaphors, I love your writing style, I love it all. Demyx's narration rocks, and this-

“Not you; the song.” She nervously reacted, and I waited for her to giggle and look sideways at one of her girlfriends, but no one’s there. The Queen does not have her subjects trailing at her skirts today. She is alone. Alone and radiant.

-I loved that. I don't love Kairi, but the idea that she was alone does make me appreciate her more. Or at least appreciate your Kairi. :)

Gah, love, love, love. Is that all I say? DX

...aaww...

I think I died from cuteness overload. I also liked the new experimantal writing style.

HEART!

Heya. Lol.

Nice entry. The way you wrote this is unique. It seems sluggish, as if Demyx is too lazy to say the words - but man, I find it cool. xD; and funny lmao.

Sweet job x)

And yays Kuddos for Demyx for telling Kairi to have faith in him! Pretty n,n

I thought Kairi would die or sth, but no she didn't - which is good, y'know. xD

Thanks a lot for entering and good luck! (:

- - - - -

f e l i a

- - - - -

Absolutely brilliant. Just wow. I didn;t like Kairi(In the game), but you kept her character and managed to make me like it - Kudos to you!

Oh my God, I love you. Okay, that was a little creepy, but- oh my God this was amazing. I loved the style so, so much!

Honestly, you most certainly did not fail. I adored their meeting, how she went to see him everyday, how he didn't care about his job after he met her, how his friends were assholes, how the rain started pouring when they were on the roof, how you put in the 'faith' element, and -huge gasp for breath- how he wished that they would stay together forever.

In short, this was a damn good story. Total fave.

Oh...!

So beautifully done...

Keep it up, Constance!