Very nice so far and I like the budding romance between Kuybi and Lee, You could do a sequel that has the nine tail as Kage of her own village. That would be a powerfull village. Maybe she would have grandchildren from Lee by then. I can see quite a few human misfits being members of her village too.

It seems good to me but I have never read Naruto. I have read a few fanfics about Naruto so I know the broad outline. And I think your premise for the story is quite original. I look forward to reading more of it.

please update

this is a cool story and story idea

Good story, I hope you update ^^

The problem here is not so much Chitose being overpowered as it is Chitose's attitude. While a certain amount of resentment is probably to be expected, self-righteous screaming fits at other ten year old children is a bit... much. Especially considering that Chitose is herself ten or so as well.

Ten year olds are simpler than that.

Also, please do remember that Chitose is ten years old. It's a bit early to be dating.

Your story could definitely use some editing and proofreading. (which I'd gladly do if I had time to spare right now. If you're willing, I suppose I could add that to my long-term TODO list)

Also, you made a lot of changes which can't believably trace their origin back to Naruto being stillborn... and one of the big unwritten rules of good AU fanfiction is to make all of your changes trace their cause back to a single event.

However, it is still quite an enjoyable read, so I don't mind that much. Hence, only the editing and proofreading really need to be taken care of.

I look forward to future chapters and, if you ever get stuck, feel free to ask me for help. I have experience getting people past their writer's block.

Yay finaly an update to this story :) i love the new chapter. Keep the chapters coming and update soon.

I was so certain that it would be like Naruto's first C mission, that when Gai came back, I thought it was an impostor.
His little speech killed that idea, though...

Please update soon!

Never seen a fic like this before. I gotta say, You have now gotta new fan for your story. I really enjoyed the whole sealing idea. no one has done that for yet...I think.

I'm really enjoying your story so far, but I do have one problem, just from my personal preference.

You already use the Japanese names for techniques and other things, so would you consider writing the names in the Japanese way? Not that it's a big deal, but I keep having to switch things around in my mind when I read your story. You already have Rock Lee and Maito Gai correct, but the rest, according to Japanese grammer, should have their surnames first and their individual names last.

It may just be that I'm a bit OCD, so this can probably be disregarded as yousee fit. All of my favorites so far have them used correctly. Normally if they're not, I don't even read the story when I see it.

I agree with you about the bashing as well as Sakura and Sasuke. I stopped reading Uzuki-kun's stories after I read what he wrote about the characters in his author page. It all depends on how the character is written. No one should bash a character in fanfiction, just make him or her better.


Thanks for listening to my rambling, see ya next chapter.

Fantastic story and the first time that i have incountered this type of plot line and i have to say that i love it so keep the chapters coming and PLEAS UPDATE SOON! :D

Ooh... I'm sad you made Sasuke's team pass!
I mean: Kakashi would have had not much to do (other than eventual special missions) and would have certainly finished helping Gai instruct the children...
Just imagine their level at the next exam with Gai and Kakashi to train them... :-D

Bah! Too bad...

Well... Please update soon!

Naruto...without Naruto? Sore ga chouto fushigi desu nee. Demo, sono hanashi wa omoshiroi desu. One thing though, why is Kyuubi female? But, like you said, this is not Cannon. I hope that this story's going to take some interesting turns. (Ducks behind flameproof barrier and looks for translation of the early Naruto chapter)

Had to read again the previous chapter because I didn't remember why they were in the hospital...

I think telling Tenten and Neji was a good idea!

... Ah? Wasn't it "Kyubi no Kitsune"?

"Tenten, I am suddenly finding myself needing a new domicile. Would it be to much to ask if I could stay with you for a while?" :-) I like the way you said that :-)

I wonder if her other friends will take the news as well as...

Please update soon: I wish to know!