ooh interesting wth the final line very good, great final impact thing going on...

Nice. I think you hit each one of the characters very well. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful story. I really liked what you did with D'Argo's point of view.

Wow! I really liked that. Very well handled and written. I especailly liked what you wrote for D'Argo, becuase it simply made so much sense. Not only did you right every character well, you wrote them as they were THEN, not NOW. They've changed since then, their thoughts are subtlely different. I only wish there had been more! Perfect!

I really like this! Neat to see how different characters perceive the same situations. I especially like Chricton's and Dargo's POVs. Nice work!