Reviews for Because She's Lily

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mustardgirl1128 2007-11-26 ch 1,	abuseno, I really enjoyed the last line. I answer stuff like that all the time. that or "I dunno, because..." and stop. its totally a lot better because he was drunk! =-)
BonniDolle 2007-10-12 ch 1,	abuseThat last line was a lot better than the 'because she's half of me' one... so cute! Drunk!Sirus... he's funny!
RandomnessAndTea 2007-09-20 ch 1,	abuseCongratulations! You are the newest graduate of the reviews lounge. I, on the other hand, am suffering from extreme review deficiency. At least, I was until A certain Lexie-H noticed this...anyway, you use very vivid imagery, and you convey Lily through the eyes of James quite well. I would give you some constructive criticism, but I am new to the site, and I see nothing obviously wrong about the story. You write thought well, and emotion. "I could taste you on my tongue, a deliciously dizzying taste I could never explain even to myself, and just saying your name was like having jewels in my mouth." Oh how I wish I could write that way. Again, glad to see you have twenty reviews!
Bad Mum 2007-09-13 ch 1,	abuseI love the images of james holding Lily's heart and putting it back together when it was broken. And a drunken Sirius is very funny! Good story!
something-like-love 2007-09-13 ch 1,	abuseOh, that was so incredibly wonderful :) I like the last line you have, so sweet and perfect. lol drunken Sirius and James are so funny :D Especially "Leely." LOL! This was such a great oneshot!
CaramelBoost 2007-09-12 ch 1,	abuseAww this is so cute. Nice job. I don't really know what else to say, so I guess I'll leave it at this; good work! xox Caramel
Franklet 2007-09-09 ch 1,	abuseno! the final sentence is perfect. why do you we love half the people we do? You can't put it into words, you just love them cause they're...them I adore your writing style (it reminds me of someone but I can't think of who...) and the story flows very well. keep up the good work!
Athena G 2007-09-06 ch 1,	abuseThat was lovely. It was funny and heart-warming and I really like your style of writing - your use of unique similies and metaphors throughout the piece. I also like how James is addressing Lily as 'you' throughout. It adds intimacy and makes it all the more touching. The last line was as it should be. Nicely written.
LadyMarauderette 2007-08-29 ch 1,	abuseOh, I thought this was slash at first. I really like it! I hate it when good stories like this dont get much reviews! Its really well written! =D
Chaos Is Destiny 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseI really like this story. It's too cute. I love the last line. It's perfect. Really, it's great. Good job. I look foward to reading anything else you write.
Frayed Misfit 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseCaptivating, Hilarious, Real! Just a few attributes that I would use to describe your story. I quite enjoyed the last line, it was simple and seemed to be what James would actually say, yet it seemed that the question sobered him up? "It was you, of course." Was a lovely twist, what innovative writing! This fic moved me. I heartily thank you.
purtyinpink71121 2007-08-22 ch 1,	abuseAw, this is so cute, and just an all around amazing story! Kudos =] -Skye
SweetSouthernGal 2007-08-19 ch 1,	abuseBecause She's Lily is much better than "Because she's half of me." Your evaluation of it was about right. I do like the story, it's very descriptive. Almost too much with the descriptions of Lily, really. Especially since he's supposed to be drunkp but its still a good story.
A Shade of Grey 2007-07-20 ch 1,	abuseI like how James can picture Lily perfectly even when he's drunk. :)
An Aspiring Author 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abusei liked the end! but it was all good! the description of lily was great! good job!

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