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| Sconnell 2008-05-09 ch 17, anon. | abuseReally, really, really good story! Very well written, especially the end! Thank you for writing and sharing with the rest of the world- it made the perfect 'end of the week' treat. Thanks Sarah |
| kat2747 2008-04-14 ch 17,  | abuseso cute. a total departure, and totally adorable! Thanks! |
| TheHamsterInMyMind 2008-03-29 ch 17, | abuseLOL! That was very, VERY entertaining. |
| Mikki 2008-02-02 ch 17, anon. | abuselmao the tickling scene with the water and shower and her almost exzloding with laughter made me seriously roll on the floor laughing, *sighs* that was so funny |
| LY 2007-11-23 ch 17, anon. | abuseGreat story! I loved Laura and Bill's interactions when they were 'acting' and her personal dilemma was very well written. The tension in the shower scene was especially well done. Thanks for writing. |
| Sam Kelli 2007-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseAmazing, printed the entire thing well writen and page turning! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 17, | abuseChapter fourteen was a quickee, but you covered a really important scene. The way you ended it was great. I love Laura in control, and she had it all the way at this press conference. Chapter fifteen was another quickee but showed something quite different - Laura in control but not. She's made her decision and has to wait to see if Bill is going to go along with what she hopes for. I like this Laura - she's taking an emotional risk that kind of surprises me, but pleases me, too. Chapter sixteen: “People are so rarely disappointed that no one has tried to assassinate them,” Bill observed. Bill is never better than when he's got the dry humour turned on high. And this little married-couple exchange made me smile... “You’ve gone insane,” Bill muttered, getting up and walking over to his drinks area. “Must be spending too much time with you,” Laura retorted." In Chapter seventeen, this exchange was perfectly Laura: "And I need… Well, I need you.” “You don’t need me – ” “Well, I want you,” she told him, lightly resting her hands on his chest. Once again, you had me almost likeing Zarek, and I totally adored the line Bill gave her and her repeating it. You did good with this story. It's funny, touching, and is so bloody entertaining I can't believe it. Even the second time around! Thanks for sharing the fun! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 13, | abuseThe slow build of this is very well done. The last line was perfect: "And it took all the willpower she possessed not to raise her head and kiss him back." |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 12, | abuseWhew! That dance was well written! And Kara was her usual magnificent self. You did good with this chapter! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 11, | abuseAh...I so love this chapter. It's just a perfect balance of nervous humour and realisation...You wrote them so comfortably. *happysigh* |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 10, | abuse“We sound like an old married couple,” he informed her, his face completely serious, and close to horrified. I loved the 'and close to horrified.' That was very astute. You never fail to impress! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 9, | abuseI was laughing aloud at this. So absurd, and so outrageously funny! Saul and Bill's exchange was priceless. ANd I could so picture Laura trying to hold back her laughter. Great writing! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 8, | abuseI like the growing ease of their conversation. It really shows itself well in this chapter. The humour is lovely, too, and the story is developing at a perfect pace. This is so much fun! |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 7, | abuseI loved this! Your Kara is adorable and precocious. Bill and Laura are perfect together. *happysigh* |
| Mariel3 2007-05-17 ch 6, | abuseChapter 5 was a nice interlude. This chapter was great - I loved Lee's slow realisation and then his shocked reaction. Nicely done! |