Oh, crap. That was so depressing. Wonderfully written, but holy moly. I'm really sad now. T__T

that was really good. except for the ending. it was so sad. but still good...

obsessive

Ah, I knew I'd read this one before.
I reviewed as 'WNU', although I don't have a clue where I got that name from...

My opinion of this fic hasn't change - I am still awed by it.

~Miss.Yamapi.Kara

I love this, it warmed my heart.
So like Sasuke, that bastard. Though it may not be like him to forget it was perfet.

I seriously cannot explain ow much I love this.

Bastard. Sasuke is such a heartless bastard. And the worst thing is, I can actually imagine him doing this to poor Naruto. Poor, faithful Naruto thrown away "on a whim" by Sasuke-teme.

That was as very sweet, heartmoving story. Despite my irritation, I really liked how it ended.

Fascinating story... It's actually pretty good.
And I have to agree with you; the state of India is horrific. I've never been there, but hearing about it while I sit happily in my house in America having my cheerful childhood... It's just... Argh. When I grow up, if I make enough money, I'll go to India and go around passing out food and money or something...
But seriously, I don't see how you grownups can STAND sitting around, in your clean, warm houses, living out your cheerful lives, completely ignoring them.
I'm just thirteen... I think if I had to go through what they go through, I'd die. Literally.

Wow, this is the best oneshot I've ever read.

You wrote it so well.

It's sad how that is really like Sasuke.
He take's something, makes it feel happy and loved but only to leave it broken, shattered and alone.


Your brother is so lucky, who knows what would happen if someone else found him. I've seen many beggars in my time, which acctually isn't that long. I'd alway's give them money just to be scolded by my parents later. They told me that the money I give them is just used for crack and booze. Sure that may be the case for some but not many. Most beggars need the money and won't use it for such mediocre things as drugs and alcohol.

I liked it a lot. :)
It made me sad, but you know,
it's true, that's exactly how Sasuke is...
getting to know people,
winning their trust
and then breaking everything, just because
he can.
It was an awesome story.

Cruel. *sigh*

How could you EVER disappoint me?

Even if it's so angsty that it makes me cry, I'll still love it.

i. hate. sasuke. ugh, leaving naruto like that! grr *strangles her sasuke chibi*

but, im not surprised. you are right, that is so like sasuke.

great story!

can anyone be sure why they fell out of love with someone?.?.?. but honestly it was ok...maybe im just gettin tired of the 7 billion sasunaru fan fics ive read in the past three days...ok maybe 7 billion is alot of exaggeration but still...it was good though... your right never bet against a hyuuga

He..he forgot about him? *wa* Great though and the reptition is
a good ending

That was a really depressing ending...

It was a very beautifully written story, I'd have to say. The repetitions were necessary and they are what makes this story even better. Because yeah Sasuke's whim has cost so many people so much. But yes, somehow I feel that the ending was complete and incomplete at the same time.

Complete if you look at that this is how life works. Incomplete if you are a sucker for happy ending *cough*me*cough*
But still I feel that Sasuke leaving Naruto is somewhat so unnatural, in this context. Of course he left him in the manga and yeah well T_T

But then your potrayal of Sasuke makes it possible for Sasuke to fall out of love with him. But completely forgetting him? Not even recognizing him? That is kinda strange because I never see Sasuke as someone who would forget even the smallest, most trivial or seemingly insignificant thing. He is the type to remember.

Falling out of love, yes, forgetting... kinda odd. But it works somewhat. But yeah, this story did manage to depress me a lot. Somehow all that I have read has been sad and I have to go and write sad stuff too TT_TT

Apart from that, it was a very well written fic, and you deserve a lot of praise and you get my appreciations! ^_^

Before I wrap this up; about the beggars, I wonder if your aunt told you, there are gangs that kidnap children who are lost, then they maim them. Yes they do. They break their arms or legs or cut their tongues and then force them to beg. Since physical handicap is a way to attract pity.

Beggary in India is a very big problem and I am honestly very much moved whenever I see beggars in my own city. These people frequne the pilgrimage cities such as the one I live in and I have seen the true face of that kind of poverty. And I have seen the gangs too, and the people who work for them with my own eyes.
And you are right that it is a very humbling experience. And a sad one too.
Your brother was very lucky if he was found.
Anyway...I hope I didn't scare you with this long ass and mostly nonsensical review. I am just really moved by this sort of stuff.

Great fic! I'd never thought about that line of Sasuke's in that way before. Interesting interpretation.

I think the repetition was one of the features of this fic that made it substantial and even powerful. The short sentences made it easy to read and understand while ensuring the story would capture the reader's attention, and that it did. :D

Interesting portrayal of Sasuke, to show that he does in fact act entirely on whims, and to have him just "feel like" having Naruto one moment then making him disappear the next. Nice dialogue by Temari and Neji as well, also Ino; very fitting and just the right amount - not too much and you managed to convey the important ideas in speech instead of losing yourself in dangerous wordiness. Loved it! :)

The whole way through this fic, I felt happy about the way it was going. Then the end came. And I want so badly to shake your hand.
You managed to smack me in the face without even touching me! :P Such a dark and surprising ending - extremely well written to make my jaw drop and my eyes tear up. Not enough to make me actually cry, but perfect to make me become solemnly silent and pensive for a moment.

This line: "The beggar, who had stiffened at the sight of the man, seemed to shatter at his departure." made me feel suddenly broken, as if I were watching it all happen in front of me. I love to get those sorts of feelings from the things I read, though it doesn't happen often enough.

Fantastic last line: "Later that day, Sasuke wondered why the blonde hair and blue eyes of the dusty beggar boy had seemed so familiar."

I also empathise with the things you wrote about at the end of your fic, concerning beggars. I've seen such things as well, and I know what you mean by it being humbling. I'm glad to hear that more people have the same opinion. *sad smile*

Well, all in all, a great fic! A great read and I'm glad that I did read it. Thankyou for sharing it! Goodluck with other writing and know that it is appreciated. :)