I like it. You've turned Camille into a far more interesting character than what we've seen on the show and her relationship with Shego was pretty interesting.

Perhaps you could make a sort of Camille-centered fic on her "newbie" exploits into the criminal underworld? I think your version of Camille could be well expanded on.

good story, i enjoyed reading it.

Good story. The rewrite concludes in a much less open ended way than the orginal. You did a great job of presenting this story in a way that could fit with the show.

If Penelope was supposed to be a refrence to Danny Phantom, good on that.

I liked the first version a lot, but this one is even better. Great job.

Keep the good writing.