Reviews for Emersion
Mister Bigbucks 8/28/07 . chapter 12
good story.
StarlightFilly 8/28/07 . chapter 12
*cries* Whoever said all god things must come to an end need to be shot...it isn't fair!
StarlightFilly 8/28/07 . chapter 11
YEY! I love it still...*cries* don't end it!
Aurona 8/28/07 . chapter 11
Is this the last chapter? *confused* Everything seems to be resolved, so why the epilogue? Hmm.
Draic 8/28/07 . chapter 11
Hey! Nice story, glad to see Squall's finally accepted Rinoa!

Geez, that boy certainly makes things difficult for himself.

Your writing has improved a lot; it's great to see. :)

One thing I think you could work on is getting the characters' reasoning. A lot of the time here I was surprised by how the characters acted - the excuses they gave for the things they did would not seem real. I can understand why Squall would be hesitant about returning to Garden and Rinoa, but I don't think he gave himself a reason to stay away completely.

A smaller example is that Rinoa would of course be angry to find out that Squall had deliberately stayed away from her, but I don't think that she would be so angry as to leave Esthar and travel all the way to Balamb, then have to be convinced by Quistis to return just to find out why. I think that realistically, she'd just go somewhere else in the palace, or in Esthar city for a while.

Don't pay too much attention to me though, I rarely finish my own stories cause I'm so critical! :) It was a good story, and I enjoyed it.
Allyarra 8/27/07 . chapter 11
Aww. He came back. I loved it! I'm so sad there's only the epilogue left now! Anywho, can't wait for it and good luck with your classes!
StarlightFilly 8/6/07 . chapter 10
NO! Squall can't leave...he's going to come back right? Surprise her?...HE HAS TOO!
fan 8/4/07 . chapter 10
amazing ... youve got the attitudes of the characters unlike other fics... completely realistic(as of the game of course)...man.. im gonna hunt you down if you dont post the final chapters... iv been waitin for 16 days now... get it goin! hehe more power to you
JayLiyah 8/4/07 . chapter 10
All I can say is I hope you're working very hard on the next chap, because I'm definitely caught up in what just happened. Argh... stupid Squall. He just has to be so damn difficult.

Please continue!
Ojuuh 7/21/07 . chapter 10
:'( I'm sorry about my last review, for some reason most of it got cut out.. .
JokersKurse 7/20/07 . chapter 10
m enjoying this a lot. Good penmanship you have great talent.
Synphony in X Major 7/20/07 . chapter 10
First of all, you're moving to Boise, as in Boise, Id? I live in Kuna, about 20 minutes away from Boise! One of my friends goes to one of the Boise high schools! That's pretty neat :]

I really liked this one, I mean a lot. It's nice to see that not everything will be perfect because a lot of stories are to fairy tale-ish to me, so this seems much more realistic of how people would approach this type of situation. I can't wait to read the next chapter :]]
J.L. Zielesch 7/20/07 . chapter 10
Waiting time...yay...
Ojuuh 7/20/07 . chapter 9
Ah, I . Anyways, nice job! :D
Aurona 7/20/07 . chapter 10
Yo! That was pretty long! :D I was suspicious that this thing was almost over because Binary was roughly the same length and the problems seem to be winding down. But it's not good to stay too long at the party, eh?

The SeeD ball... x-x You know, I'm actually starting to feel sorry for Cale. I know what has to happen in the end, and I know that it's going to be a bittersweet ending no matter what. But even knowing that, like all curious people, I still want to know how it ends.

And of course, NO TYPOS. :P Pbt!
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