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SpicyRoses
2009-06-30 . chapter 1
This is one of those poems/fanfics I'm so glad to find. This poem IS me when it comes to Narnia, and I think everyone, who's a fan. Thanks for posting it! ;]
SpicyRosesx
MilkMustache
2008-12-13 . chapter 1
I love this.
Its beautifully written.
its exactly how I feel whenever I read the books, watch the movies, hear anything related and whenever I just think about Narnia.
Mercury Gray
2008-06-05 . chapter 1
Nice! There's a lot of good things going on in this poem, a lot of good lines, the 'at nights' to be specific, but I think sometimes the messages in your repetitive lines after that gets sort of overshadowed by the fact that the beginning is used over and over again. The poem might be more effective if you simply were to say something like

At night I dream.

I dream of a land of rolling grass,

of the Stone Table cracked in two

I dream of my home from which I am held.

[and I think you need another thought here, something about the nature of the home from which you're being held?]

Anyway, that's just one example. Still, a very good write as is. Nice work.
Thara June
2008-03-08 . chapter 1
I know what you're talking about!

All the hurt will be worth it!
WonderfulLife
2007-07-19 . chapter 1
awesome! thats really all i can say!
I am Brooklyn
2007-07-15 . chapter 1
as a fellow Christan i would just like to say...YOU ROCK i have been on fan fiction for about a month and started seeing traces of Christans all over the site. it is awesome to see you out there.
HOUSEM.D.FanForever
2007-06-28 . chapter 1
fantastic job writing this! I think that you expressed what a lot of Christians feel/believe. Great job :)

God and peace
Vanessa :)
TastyAsItGets
2007-04-29 . chapter 1
I came across this at Narnia Fan Fiction Revolution! I'm not much of a poem person (or a Christian), but this is really sweet! I so wish it was real too...GAH!
Pens or Buttons
2007-04-22 . chapter 1
Beautiful...I am a fellow Christian as well, and have thought the same things. You see that's what's so great about the story. It's written about a place that we could barely ever dream of and yet, it did happen. It happened on this Earth 20 years ago and that is a good reason to lift your chin up and be proud that you are a King or Queen of Narnia; that all humans are the Kings and Queens of the world. God gave us that gift and the hope for tommorow to be a brighter day can keep us going throughout the ages. He's already given you hope. You just have to climb on and be completely blown away.
Dearheart
2007-04-21 . chapter 1
Wow...the timing is obviously from God. I just finished writing a new story called A Message. It's basically a letter from Aslan to you; I think you should read it. I wrote almost right after you wrote this poem; perhaps it really is Aslan's response to what you wrote!

Great poem; I know exactly how you feel. May "Aslan keep you in His mighty paws".
elecktrum
2007-04-20 . chapter 1
Very pretty. What I find I like most about it is that anyone - be they a character from the Narniad or someone that loves the stories dearly - could be the speaker.
vrangr
2007-04-20 . chapter 1
very poetic! (in a good way of course!) :)
lost.rules815
2007-04-20 . chapter 1
that's awesome! i love it!
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