 windxalchemist 2007-04-25 . chapter 1wow.
I really like this one shot. It was...in a way canon, and in a way, not. But it kept them in character, and I really liked it.
The only suggestion I can make is that you make the story more clear, by using more commas, semicolons, and italicizations. It was hard to tell what was happening, and what had happened.
And by the way, is this Naruto, or Shippuuden? |