Reviews for Chronicles of Alphia

Reviews For: Chronicles of Alphia

Kikushi 2007-11-19 ch 2,	abuseAw! So sweet. =)
keeki 2007-05-11 ch 2,	abuseThat was sweet ^_^ Some people probably can't imagine Albel crying, but I can, I mean he is human after all, not like some sort of emotionless robot. Although, I just have one question, on the last sentence: "And she would stay with him and insure that she ever again caused him to cry." Is it supposed to say "And she would stay with him and insure that she [n]ever again caused him to cry." Or am I just reading it wrong? o.o
mistress-reebi 2007-05-06 ch 3,	abuseInteresting idea to switch the roles. Sophia was in character but from Airyglyph and it showed in how you decribed her. I really liked the characterisation in all of the chapters. "Throwing a frown at him" o interesting description Keep Writing!
mistress-reebi 2007-05-05 ch 2,	abuseI liked how you exaggerated the story and had the pacing really slow. I can't write a lengthy senario that takes pages. "holding back a tide of emotions building at the dam of her resistance. " I really liked that line, espeically "tide of emotions." Maybe for the beginning change this part,"through nearly invisible creases in the skin," to make it sound more like crying. But, I liked the description on the first paragraph. I thought the ended suited well and played into his character. I could never see Albel bawling like a baby.
Girl-who-sings-the-blues 2007-04-29 ch 1,	abuseYah! "More Alphia" ! lol ^ _ ^; And you said that there will be more, right?
keeki 2007-04-21 ch 1,	abuseSweet! I think Sophia is a good counterbalance to Albel's gloominess. Keep the Alphias coming ^^
xOxAzureFlameGodxOx 2007-04-21 ch 1,	abuseThis is great! It satisfies my need for Alphia goodness XD I'd love to see some more short stories in here! ^_^
mistress-reebi 2007-04-21 ch 1,	abuseGood use of descritive narrative. The words you used also fit with the story. I really liked this line "Wetting his lips, he spoke only loud enough for her ears."

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