Just read it and it's amazing! Nice job!

great story, i enjoyed reading it.

That was pretty good. Amazing what an impact Groundhogs Day had, isn't it? It hints at some bigger wheels in motion. Someone/thing/group that has the power to reorder time, and doing so to test Ron, as it has tested others. It's an interesting concept. The Russian especially, who natural didn't die at the end of Ron's trial, since he'll presumably be needed again somewhere else, was an interesting figure. However, he seemed to give away a little too much in the chapter 2 go threw, but I guess the test was Ron being able to kill them. Although, I will say this, Kim took Ron killing those mercs pretty well. Hell, Ron took it pretty well, but then again considering the circumstances, I don't blame him. But it does bode the question: why must he be ready to kill to protect the one he loves? Or, on a truly darker tangent, why was he tortured to the point where he had to cross the line and kill other human beings? I know this was the final chapter, and I do like when stories leave some questions, but that's a big one, but it'd be interesting to see where else this could go.

Water and Shade

Well first off let me say that this was a prety good story. Personally i think that there was the possibility of a little more drama leading up to the final ending, but then again I did come in with some asumptions when i first started reading the story.

After you had originally posted the first chapter my first though was that this story might be a take off of "Daybreak" the show which abc put in lost's place temprorarly over the winter break. At first reading the second and the third reading didn't seem to make any corlations to daybreak. Until I thought about the russian, and the ending of daybreak.

Now looking back over the whole story I have to wonder, are all the coralations between your story and daybreak just a cowincidance, or has someone been watching dabreakonline?

(And did I say good story + keep up the writing?)

-JLBShecky

Nice story, also reminds me of a Twlight Zone episode in which the actor Dennis Weaver is waiting to be sent to death by electric chair. But this is a night mare that happens every night only the parts of the "actors" are switched.

Great job, thanks

Wow! Good story, I like how you kind of left it open for a sequel.

The last chapter already? Well, that was fast. Right, down to the review. Ron must be getting annoyed with this. What's Ron's plan? Mr. B must be wondering how he knew the answer and the question. Wait, why does he want extra homework? Rufus must be wondering how he knows this. You can't really blame him. Ron's asked for explosives before? That rant is just getting monotonous. How does Drakken not know what they're doing there? Did he use Monkey Kung Fu before? Wait, the self destruct is still going to go off? Or is it just the timer wasn't disconnected? Wait, why did he say Ron would tell her? How did the Russian survive the explosion? So Ron was hit this time? Well, that's new. So he survived. Happy he met the guy that killed him and Kim repeatedly? Interesting way to like someone. Great story!

Now I am truly baffled, seriously. Story itself is really good, I enjoyed it a lot, but whole stitch leaves one thing wide open: WHY? And another one, who are the ones wanting Ron to prove himself...

Seriously, this smells very much like setup for sequel, am I right?

Motor-Ed

Why do I think I'm going to wake up and read this story all over again?

Nice one. In sppite of the fantastic elements, I can see it happening.

Just one question. Who is the Russian? He's not just a mercenary. But I can't figure out how I should know this guy.

I'd put this into the category of weirdfic. That's not an insult, believe me. I think it should be a subgenre by itself. What separates a good weirdfic from a bad one is the author's ability to create a set of laws from the beginning and be able to stick to them throughout. No matter how bizarre your story might be, if you can rationalize it with your premise, it still can make perfect sense. Heck, I'm writing a story where a tiny man named Duff lives in Ron's butt. Getting off topic.

What I'm trying to say is that even though your story leaves some questions (Heaven is now run by the KGB?) and goes against what people might call conventional narrative, you stuck by the characters and you stuck by the rules you made up for your own little universe. All in all, a well-done story and an enjoyable read.
-Brother Bludgeon

Now that one was a little strange. But Ron would practically do anything to keep Kim safe. Kinda weird about the Russians though.

Great story. But who is the Russian? What was the purpose of this 'test'?

Looking forward to reading your other work.

Gerald

Very good. Maybe in a day or two exactly who or what the Russian is will click in my head. Good old Ron, the man can come through. Good action, dialog, and hurrah for Rufus.

Excellent story with a very interesting plotline.
I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

Ok dude, good ending. Although I must say, you scared me there with Ron getting shot and him in Kim's arms. But you pulled it through in the end. Good work. I can see why you did three chapters: any more and it would've become drawn out. Anyway, great work on writing a unique piece of work that sucks you in. I look forward to seeing where you take this story.
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