i really liked what you've done with this - you really grasped the characters; their feelings and reactions. I'd love it if you could write a full story, your technique is amazing :)

Loved it. I definitely want more.

It is well written .maybe u should have focused more on what hapened ,i mean given more detail.and not ended the scene that quickly.still the feelings were well thought out and put out .

M. Sexytime.

PLEASE continue. I want more AJ action! PLEASE i beg of you! i loved this! continue!
~AliaraGen
Please turn this into a chapter story!

Loved it! So good, I love those two...

keep Writing (it was very good),

xxTunstall Chickxx

PLEASE KEEP GOING I LOVE THIS CHAPTER

that was a great one shot you should definitely make it into a chapter story.

nvr had jon down as bein tht sweet in tht book... bt nvr mind ^_^ i kinda wish i had htort of him like tht.

this is so sweet =] its lovely!

l8r

AC

You can't just leave us hanging! Right more! Please?

Oh, I liked it! I've seen some very poor attempts at this scene, and you were the first person who actually did it right without breaking out of character too much! Please make this into a chapter story! I look forward to reading more of your work!

I know it's been a couple months, but you HAVE to continue. I liked the way you handled Jonathan. Demanding and then sweet. It's kinda how he is as king, isn't it? It was well written all around. And fabulous. And you need to write more. Please.

Good Story
Please write another chapter!

that was really good

I like it...it's more realistic than Alanna suddenly craving sex like in some other stories...