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Reviews For: Sueños

kazalene 2008-07-01 ch 1,	abuseSigh I heart this. You got inside Brennan's mind reeaallyy well, and you made excellent use of the second person. It's things like this that I've been trying to tell you for... forever now. Your strength as a writer is zooming up on situations and giving them a really emotional - usually angsty - twist; whilst keeping very true to character. I liked how you stayed mostly in her thoughts, as opposed to writing a lot of dialogue. It made her emotions seem stronger. nods Oh, and you definitely set the standard of your work with this first piece. People didn't know what they were in for :D Much love-age! Kaz
EddyMidday 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuseAw... I'm not sure if it was cute or sad, but i love it very much. I think it's both :D.
StarDuquesneEMT 2007-10-30 ch 1,	abuseYou really captured them, and that's hard to do! I haven't gotten the nerve to try yet :)
irony882 2007-07-17 ch 1,	abuseI like the way you've written in second person. Not a lot of stories are written with that kind of viewpoint, which makes the story all the more effective. It's like the narrator is the character themself, but they're talking about themselves as if they were another person, that's why the emotions are so vivid to the reader. ...Not sure if that made sense, but... Another simple thing I liked was the title. The use of a different language than what the story is written in makes the story unique. I mean, "Dreams" is just a little too...flat, I think. I much prefer "Suenos"! I applaud on a job well done! A few typos, but nothing a beta can't fix. ;)
syd15 2007-04-26 ch 1,	abuseReally really beautiful! Actually I think you should make a second chapter, it´s screaming for it!! Your writting is wonderfull!! Kisses!!
jemb 2007-04-23 ch 1,	abuseI thought this was an incredibly insightful piece. I felt like I was seeing inside Brennan's mind. You captured the essence of their relationship perfectly, taking it just that little step further than we get to see on the show. I got chills reading it (that's a good thing). Your style of writing flows and was easy to read. Paragraphs were a good size, not too long so you start to skim read and not too short either. The little dialogue used was good because it kept the focus on what was going on in Brennan's head. There were a few typos though. I don't know if you work with a beta but I find it good to have someone else check for mistakes because when I write, I'm too close to the piece and miss the obvious mistakes. In saying that though, they didn't really detract from the story so its not a big deal. I've posted stories with lots of mistakes myself. For your first real posting in this category it was impressive and I'm adding it to my favourites. I hope you go ahead and write the case story you have planned. If this is a piece to judge your standard of work I'm sure it will be good. I'll be looking out for it. Jemb
luli27 2007-04-23 ch 1,	abuseVery nice. Introspective and thoughtful. I can see her feeling very much like that - actually, I can see anyone feeling like that if you've never been in love and know you're on the verge of the real thing, I suppose it can be very scary. I also liked that though they aren't together, she knows they will be and that she'll be ready some day. Maybe you can do something when she's finally ready and realizes it for the first time?
Caramelchan 2007-04-23 ch 1,	abuseNice! Real cute! And you're doing better than me... I can't do case stories lol.

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