oh boy that was... yeah 'Ghost of a premature baby muse' pretty much covers it. good writing though. but Riza was a little TOO stoic. shes only human.

Hmm. It does seem a little odd. It starts out "you and he", and becomes "you and I" and "we". I know that it says doen the bottom that by the end she's imagining what Roy would have wanted, but it still is a bit of a disconcerting change.

I'm not a huge angst fan myself (tragedy, yes, angst, not so much), but this is still well written. It's a good thought-process.

awesome really! i was enjoying every bit of it! it was as if i'm feeling it too! very vivid description! ^^

like!like!like!

one way or another, i can seem to understand.. riza's subconcious POV forming what might be roy's thought... hm... lol

~when Logic meets Art~
-Kai Isolated-

That was very sad.

And my one comment: You almost could have cut the '-Roy' at the end. You know. You just know that those last few lines were him, whether it was her mind pretendingi she heard him or what he really wanted to say, you just KNOW it was him.

Which is really a testament to the way you wrote this! Great job!

aw that was deep nicely done

nah.. i get your point here.. btw, i love within temptation.! haha.. i dunno.. you made me cry with this fic.. yeah.. emo again.. it's just that i remember someting really painful in my past that keeps haunting me, much like that of riza's.. so, yeah.. basically, i cried while reading this awesome fic.. keep it up.! ja.!

Erinn~

It's okay I'm sure Roy did know if she was hurt.Great story(thing)anyway I like all your FMA stories.