Just something I caught on to, some of your writing and actions of characters are very repetive. "Nace simply nodded," I didnt count but you should.

I LOVE YOU LIKE THIS MUCH!-!

Once again, you're doing an awesome job of pulling the plot points together seamlessly. Awesome. Although, the dialogue has an odd feel to it. The game separates each little paragraph, but if it's all Carth talking, you don't need to separate it. You can string it together in one set of quotes. Like,
"Bla bla bla, I don't trust you, boo." Carth said.
"You suck." Nace said.
"I do not." Carth said.
If that helps, anyway. Good chapter.

I like your battle descriptions. Unlike the game, their is real blood and violence. I think you took the high road. Good deal. You're stringing the plot points together very well, rather than just randomly doing stuff (which is kinda how I played the game). Good chappie.

That's a good reason for the entire breaking into people's apartment thing heh. I never would have thought of that. Good chapter. The only thing I noticed was that you wrote "As she drank the hot drink" and it's a touch repetitive, you could say beverage or caffa or something.
Otherwise, perfect.

Carth is good at sticking his foot in his mouth.

Always liked Zelka.

Hey! Great job! I love your KotOR story so far^_^ I love reading everybodies rendishens of Revan and the other characters^_^ I have one question though...How do you pronounce Nace's name? It's been bothering me slightly and I'm curious. Regardless, I enjoy reading your story a lot, keep up the amazing work^_^
~hpjedi1

Cut off the Sith's noodle. Then have carth use the blaster to cauder the whole shut.

Oh, new chapter! And finally the Sith are on the scene too! Exciting! I wonder if Nace and Carth make it out? Hm... actually that'd be quite a twist if you had them captured now and taken ot the Sith base... that way they could do that bit and break out... further excitement! It's great to see an update anyhoo.

LOL! "Like what you saw?" Such a Carth thing to say. Mwa ah. Awesome chappie. Like that we're getting a back story beyond "I was in the republic", it's cool. Can't wait for new chapters.

Haha ou lala, good one Nace, spying on Carth in the shower, tisk tisk. Haha, anyways great job as usual Aimee :) I liked the chapter a lot!

Yay Aimee! *Claps Hands* This is a great new chapter, excellent work. Keep it up :)

'tis radd:].
there is no point in this; you're sitting next to me.
i could just tell you that i think this is very radd + that i'm proud of you for writing more:].
ilyy

Hey! Great work in the latest update! :D I was so happy to see you had done some more of this story! I liked the fact that at the start you continued on from the previous chapter with the caffa thing, lol. And the incident with Davik's thugs was well described. Hope you have a chance to write the next chapter sometime, I'm really enjoying it!