super!

by the sounds of this guy hes cute

other than spelling and grammer everything is good i like the plot you made up and i hope you'll update though it says you haven't updated in a year but if you decide to finish the story me and probably other people will be ready and yeager
i don't know if i'm the only one like this but i'll read just about anything thats not superperverted or just plain crazy sorry about rambling

UPDATE!

Cute hope you update soon!

update asap=)

Its been 3 months, you gotta update soon!
~Jayy

GREAT! Please Continue soon!

No real grammar errors. Good job. The only issue is your format.

Each speech quote deserves its own paragraph, and at the end of each speech quote, there is a comma.

ie. "Thank you," he said... ; you see the comma right before the quote mark?

But the main issue is that each speech quote deserves its own paragraph. That's a bigee. Good job!

nice to see te next chapter please continue

Continue. cool story

this fic is relly good. keep up the good work

yay, chapter 3 is finally up!
although I did notice a few grammar errors, the story was enjoyable

Was that the end? If so, it's a really sad ending. If not, I look forward to the next update!

I noticed a couple of mistakes in this chapter, but they were all minor spelling mistakes. I'm more of an Advanceshipper than a Pearlshipper, but I really enjoyed this story so far. You set up a great dynamic between Hikari and Satoshi, and it was a very cute read. I hope to read more soon.

how could you just leave it there?! :(