it's great to have a conclusion to that story, it has a nice bitersweet quality to it and it is a fine piece of writing. Thank you

Thanks for writing this. I bawled at the end of that episode when she had to leave with her parents. It was good to see her come out of it all on top.

I really loved the story, until the "One day, through an intermediary" part. After that it's rushed and just... I dunno, boring. Until then I can't find anything wrong with it really, any Mary Sue you think it may contain doesn't exactly pop out or anything.