Ranma miraculously enough,has managed to stay male throughout the night,
[This isn’t unusual, much less ‘miraculous’]

position,
and his heart
[Extraneous break]

" he just lives to torment me,"
[Where’d the instigation for this come from? All Genma did was roll over]

it's outcome,
[its]

rope on the
top.
[Extraneous break]

unaffected for a
moment,
[Extraneous break]

containing he could
[_what_ he could]

"Well go on, Ranma," Kasumi prompted,
[Out-Of-Character: Kasumi knows that Akane’s overenthusiastic in many things, and while she may say ‘it’s nice that she tries’ she’s never coerced anybody into eating Akane’s cooking. Particularly if it’s at ‘toxic’ level]

"thank you Akane
[OOC: Ryouga may lie when he eats Akane’s bad cooking, but Ranma calls it what it is. If it’s nasty he calls it so]

"He didn't even give it a chance
[Actually, he did]

"Ranma you jerk!"
[Although I thank you for not using unnecessary Japanese, she’s still going to at least have a twinge of appreciation for his effort – the only other time he’s not gone out of his way to avoid eating her food is that one time she made cookies, and even though he got sick she smiled at him]

reaction that Akane's cooking seemed to bring out in him.
[Passing out? That’s a reaction to something inedible, not something to insult her]

if not out of, L-love,
[Lame and interruptive]

sensitive areas.
[She sleeps in pajamas, she’s still likely to get mad if she finds him in her room uninvited]

in that she usually managed to keep her covers on herself while sleeping,
[1: should end in period 2: she sleeps on a bed with tucked-in covers, while he sleeps on a futon with a blanket that is easily tousled 3: Ryouga has mentioned that she ‘tosses and turns’ harshly (“No, usually it’s worse”)]

Taking a seat gingerly on the edge of her bed.
[What happened to the stealth? Adding even a portion of his weight to the mattress is going to cause it to shift and quite likely for her to wake up]

a very
contented
[Extraneous break]

Can it be that I really do care for that uncute tomboy?
[ There was very little of this highly cliché conflict (as I remember) in canon, the issue was that he has a whole brigade (hyperbolically speaking) of fiancées and he cares about all of them. He may not love them all, but he has concern and appreciation for all of them. He’s got a woefully small social circle, and that’s why he’s never pushed the fiancées away: they’re the only friends he’s got, and the ? weren’t speaking nonsense when they added “two can be as bad as one” (?)]

maybe
an aftereffect
[Extraneous break]

into the almost scalding water,
[ Furos typically aren’t any warmer than ? C, (100 degrees Fahrenheit), I wouldn’t exactly call that scalding. Granted, I have a higher heat tolerance than some people]

Moving over to the dresser where he kept his clothes,
[Don’t they usually bring their change of clothes to the furo changing room?]

Kasumi although
[Missing comma after ‘Kasumi’]

but he just started to stare at the beauty
[He’s seen better before elsewhere. Of course, this complaint about completely unneeded narrative fluff wouldn’t be needed if there was some manner of label in the summary warning that there was ‘waff’ or ‘fluff’ or overly sappy romantic moments or whatever you want to call it]

new leaves that were also growing.
[As opposed to new leaves that are shrinking]

out here…" Ranma thought
[If it’s thought, you should use some formatting or punctuation that’s _different_ from standard dialog to help your audience differentiate]

I like a fair divergence. This isn’t an interesting divergence, it’s a ball of fluff and it’s not worth trying to read the rest of the way through. I don’t necessarily mind a more romantically-minded story, as long as there’s some warning. However, this story’s summary gave the impression that Ranma would so some soul-searching and actually come to some intelligent conclusions. Drooling over Akane is not an intelligent step forward, nor is it true to either the characters or canon (Ranma ½ has much lower-key displays of affection, and while canon Ranma and Akane like each other they don’t have these moments that remind me of a deer staring at an oncoming train). Fixing the wealth of formatting, spacing, and other technical flaws would also help.

I was getting kind of worried when it started to head off into the land of magic and ancient evils and such, but this story was really good! I didn't really like the ending (IE Happi returning and re-cursing people), but it really fits with Takahashi's style of never getting anything truly done. I suppose it works.

You should write more!

This was so cute ^^

Epilogues are never easy and rarely satisfying, but you at least kept this one fun. Thanks for your work.

"Akane, going full boar, tripped" -- "full bore"

This one's tricky: "was socute sometimes" You wrote "socute" when you should have written "so cute" Note the space. This is especially important at the end of an italic phrase - the space between words will appear smaller as the italic letters lean into the space provided. Thus "cute sometimes" yields two spaces, and so looks better.

"pad to pop Akane, not" -- comma after pop, unless you mean for the pad to bop Akane.

Once I chose to call myself an author my internal editor (silent until then) has been working overtime...

Good story. Liked it before, still like it now.
Mike

Not to be confused with "When Bakas Learn" (although similar is some respects) this is a realistic, but OOC story that's enjoyable to read.
I've read it before, and I'm reading it again, which says a lot.
Regards,
Mike

lmao, great story

Great end to a great fanfic. Party on dude.

i've read this before. a long time ago. and i just have to tell you again how friggin' awesome this is. one of the best i've read. ever.

Great to see this story, and this author still tinkering with it. Great emotional content and the tickle scene and gang fight are two old favourites of mine.

i really like your story i've read over 50 and only about 10 made me want write my own.and your one of em'.

I had forgotten how much I hate this chapter...

Kodachi as someone Akane needs training to have a chance against? Kodachi? A girl who never ONCE hits Akane?

I admet that Shampoo is better, she is the best of the girls but she is still weaker then any of the boys save maybe Kuno, but Akane would have a damn good shot at takeing Ukyou one on one, and it really wouldn't take much for Akane to remove Ukyou's weapon, or for Akane is use one of her own.

Ukyou with out his baker's peel is nothing more then a good fighter, Akane is so much better then 'good' its sad. And Akane could get one of the family swords or just use her own Boken and take the fight right to Ukyou no poblem.

One would win, both would be beat to hell and there is no clear cut in that one.

If this Akane is from the Anime its just one more resin I'm glad I'll never wach it, the monga is so much better.

Guns and Roses, dude! What a great ending!

This is sort of a classic ending, but good all in all.