Very interesting story. Gives some interesting insite into how Rei thinks and her resons for betraying the commander. I like how Rei tries to stay loyal at first. A job well done!

Not bad

I liked this story (though it's description needs to be better phrased. An actual DESCRIPTION

I like how you made Rei *try* to stay with her conviction to stay loyal to the commander. I always wondered why she turned against him _

i like where you're going with this, although rei's responses to "the voice" (shall i assume it's the same "voice" shinji's mind battled with?) seem a bit out of character. the idea has a lot of potential. run with it.

It's great! But try making a longer poem.

That's all my review.

hey, that was nice. sort of poetic. i liked it.

Wow, that is really, really cool! I like this! You wrote very well for this really tough character. Please write more!

Not bad at all I like!

You figured a nice way to describe rei's loneliness.

good job.

Really poetic, good use of repition, and a good look at why Rei rebelled.

To be honest, he did more to her than just make her lonely. Nevertheless, I've been been developing a soft spot for Eva poetry lately, and I rather enjoyed it. Nice job.

? Okay, not bad, will there be more to this or is that it? 'C'