I really enjoyed getting to see Esme's thoughts. I thought this was very true to character. Good job!

Wow! What a fantastic take on Billy Black! This is really great! I would love to read a chapter from Charlie's POV when he comes home to find Jacob and the note from Bella when she left to go to Italy. Or Jasper's POV the night of Bella's birthday party.

I love that you wrote this chapter. I always wonder what is happening to the other characters of the stories when they are not in the foreground. This wonderfully heartbreaking. I can't wait to read more.

i love this its really cool

i like the second chapter a lot!..well written!

Amazing. Your a great writer.

Very powerful!

this is a really good idea and really well written. keep going, you really get inside minor charecters heads really well. i like this!

dobby

My goodness!

Reading this story I hear the tick-tick-tick of the clock as each second brings a stronger sense of dread over Esme. What an apt representation: Esme has always been one-dimensionally portrayed as motherly or nurturing. You, however, provided depth, provided reason for her uncompromising love.

Beautifully written.

I liked the part about the clock and how it fixed Esme's thoughts on the nature of time. You fleshed out her character nicely.

First i read Esme's bit, and i was like "God this is so..Esme" and then i read Billy Black bit and i was like "Wow...just wow" You have got their feelings perfectly...Really good

woah. intense. ive never read a story from billy's pov. this is original and actually pretty deep. i never thought i would use the word deep when refering to a love story about vampires and werewolves, but i did. :-)

Excellent! You have a beautiful voice for Esme. I loved hearing it!!

Just beautiful.

Great to see Billy's perspective. I love Jacob, so it's nice to get a brief look into his world and family. Have you stopped writing these chapters. I think there is some real potential for some interesting glimpses into some backstory.