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| darkchild 2008-05-28 ch 1, anon. | abusePlease update as soon as possible^_^... |
| Nokotsu 2007-07-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseC'mon I wanna see some more chappies! Please hurry and update soon. |
| kirayasha aka kira 2007-06-08 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting beginning. I can't wait to see where you're going to go with this. Besides the pairing of Ban/Jak, I also happen to like Ren/Sui and since there are so few fic out there featuring them... Now as for you beta...^^, I was surpised to read you had one, since there are a lot of little grammar mistakes sprinkled throughout this. I would either get another beta to check for grammer or take a few minutes with a book and read a a couple of paragraghs, and try picking a chapter with a bit of dialogue and you might be able to pick them out yourself. The Shichinintai refer to Bankotsu as Oo-aniki, "elder brother," rather than "Leader-san." If you do want to refer to him as "Leader," than drop the "san" as you don't need it. |
| ashikotsu 2007-05-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseupdate!! |
| Kit48 2007-05-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseupdate soon |
| Archeia 2007-05-03 ch 1, | abuseI really love this story! I like the fact that Ren and Sui aren't getting together in the first chapter! I Also like the background of how Ren's parents die. I really do wonder what Ren gets off on? Suikotsu?! Anyways, I also like it that all the Shichinintai are there! I just looked up masochism. Here it is! masochism (măs'ukizum) [key], sexual disorder in which sexual arousal is derived from subjection to physical and emotional degradation. A type of paraphilia (see perversion, sexual), masochism is explained in psychoanalysis as a destructive attitude in which the individual turns inward upon himself instead of outward upon others. It is coupled with sadism, in which sexual pleasure is derived from the infliction of pain or humiliation. So Ren gets off on his pain and humiliation, what?! If I got the definition wrong tell me. But that is cool of how Ren gets off, and it is different! I hope Ren and Sui get together soon! Ren and Sui are sexy! I know random, but whatever! I hope you update soon! |