iterresting writing .. i must admit i lost you time to time but if you read it a second time ... everything makes some sense! ;] well the story is amazing, the way you write it made it look like it was a typical drama story but it was awesome! =D

... This story was kind of hard to follow...

That's so sad... but good. The only thing I would suggest is to have some kind of break when you skip ahead in time. I suppose you could have made it a little longer too, and gone into more depth about some of the things that happened. It was still really moving though.